Talk:Shinrei Jusatsushi Tarōmaru
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Harizotoh9 in topic Expansion
 | Shinrei Jusatsushi Tarōmaru has been listed as one of the Video games good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: July 4, 2018. (Reviewed version). |
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
I love reviewing the small ones. Cognissonance (talk) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
Lead edit
- Note [a] needs to be confirmed by sources.
- Done
Gameplay edit
- albeit means "though", which doesn't fit the sentence. I suggest "outside of".
- Done
- Link "reticle" to Reticle.
- Done
- hypnotize certain types enemies Grammar: "hypnotize certain types of enemies".
- Done
Reception and legacy edit
- They found the gameplay to be deceivingly deep and intense Is "deceivingly" a quote? If so, put quotes between the word. If not, it reads very much like WP:POV.
- Not a quote, but they said it was more deep and intense than it seemed to them at first glance. I replaced "deceivingly" with "surprisingly".
- They found the auto lock-on function and scarcity of recovery items made it slightly difficult "found" in this sentence reads like it means "discovered". Perhaps clarify with "thought that".
- Done
External links edit
- MobyGames is unreliable, per WP:VG/RS.
- I removed it since it doesn't really add value. But for the record, external links do not need to be reliable WP:ELMAYBE.
Overall edit
It has few flaws, but one of which is: why no plot section? Cognissonance (talk) 23:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
- @Cognissonance: No plot section for two reasons. One, I don't know what it is. I don't own the game and no scans of the manual online. Two, according to MOS:VG, the "plot coverage should be proportional to the plot's importance in the game, as determined by its weight in the article's source material." In the case of this game, the sources don't go any further into the story than what's written here in the gameplay section. I'm sure there's more lore written in the game manual, but unless sources cover it, it'd be undue weight. WP:VGORDER suggests lumping plot with gameplay if it isn't too complex, which is what I did here. TarkusABtalk 18:06, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
- I'm satisfied with the changes. Passed. Cognissonance (talk) 19:13, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
Expansion edit
It's very tiny, and if this were to go for FA, it would need to be expanded. I've tried, but I can't really find anything. Harizotoh9 (talk) 06:32, 27 July 2018 (UTC)
- Yep, so it goes. TarkusABtalk 11:48, 27 July 2018 (UTC)
- Sega Saturn Magazine or Sega Saturn Fan would have likely done an overview and possibly an interview with the devs on this game. I just found one for Legend of Oasis. You'll just have to start digging. Also, I found a Super GamePower review of the game, and only added the review score. Their reviews are really more like overviews of the game, and half the page is filled with images with "pro-tips" and explanations which is typically more useful than the text proper. Harizotoh9 (talk) 19:54, 31 May 2019 (UTC)