Talk:Moses Malone

Accomplishment

"During the latter years of his basketball career, he was also known for wearing thick glasses during games."

That isn't an accomplishment, that's trivia. 67.188.172.165 21:53, 4 September 2006 (UTC)

Moses Malones Career highlights and awards: 13× NBA All-Star (1975, 1978–1989) Sorry but he was a 12× NBA All-Star (1978–1989) and a 1× ABA All-Star (1975) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 82.83.81.248 (talk) 00:34, 3 January 2012 (UTC)

Physical Description

Where is height and the other physical stats? Shouldn't every entry for an athlete have those? (The way, at least, they stood in the athlete's active days. We often shrink in height and gain in weight as we get older!) The Gnome 06:52, 11 March 2007 (UTC)

Picture

Could someone provide a picture? 67.188.172.165 18:59, 30 March 2007 (UTC)

Aborted college commitment

I recall a broadcast in which Lefty or his co-commentator said that Moses actually came to College Park to register for classes, but left after 3 days to sign with the Stars. Anyone got the low-down on the actual time-frame of Moses committing to Maryland, being drafted by Utah, and signing his pro contract? Ellsworth (talk) 22:54, 19 November 2007 (UTC)

Family

Wikipedia discourages trivia sections. There in information on his children in this section, but no "personal life," like many other sports legends do. There is no where to put some of that info. Basketball110 04:54, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

"fo', fo', fo'"

Did he mean it will be 4-0 all the way, or "4 games at a time"?

On Dr. J's page - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Julius_Erving - it says as follows: "... causing Malone to make the famous prediction of "fo-fo-fo (four-four-four)," meaning all the Sixers needed to do was win four games in each series. The media misinterpreted the comment and thought he meant the Sixers would sweep the entire playoffs."

I guess this is mentioned also on the 76ers page and probably others. Can someone clarify this please? Thanks. 89.138.18.232 (talk) 09:49, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

The following news articles suggest that Malone was making a sweep prediction for each series: [1][2]. I inserted a citation request in the Julius Erving article to provide evidence for the assertion that the media misinterpreted Malone. — Myasuda (talk) 13:09, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

Moses Malone Land

There is nothing in this article about Moses Malone Land. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.41.70.243 (talk) 20:38, 27 September 2008 (UTC)

Huge flaws with this article

1. Not Wikipedian, but filled with sports writer hype. For example, Malone is called a "giant" but most at his positions are his height or more.

2. Largely undocumented

3. Nothing about personal life, including why he died at the young age of 60

4. RIP Moses

Bellagio99 (talk) 14:35, 13 September 2015 (UTC)

Copyright violation

As has been discovered by Bagumba, the article as was written at the time of his death was a substantial duplication of his NBA.com bio, which is a copyright violation. If this page is to be posted at Wikipedia:In The News, the duplication needs to be dealt with. I'm in the process now, but if anyone else can help, that will speed this up. The Tool Labs duplication detector report is here. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:43, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

I'll see what I can do about that. I also need to fix the citations. - Kiraroshi1976 (talk) 17:52, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for helping. The citations are a lower priority than the copyvio. The page can go up on ITN with the citaions as they are since they aren't bare url's, but the citations would have to be fixed before any potential GA nomination. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:32, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

As of this version on 21:29, 14 September 2015, it seems that https://tools.wmflabs.org/dupdet/ issues are resolved. However, that tool is primitive, and only looks for exact matching phases. the other tool at https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios looks for patterns, and simply adding or changing a few words doesnt fool it. It is currently showing a 92.3% confidence of a copyvio. One example is the following:

• Wikipedia: "Malone, a free agent, signed a three-year contract with the Atlanta Hawks prior to the 1988–89 season, and he had another All-Star campaign"
• NBA.com: "The Atlanta Hawks signed Malone as a free agent prior to the 1988-89 season, and he went on to have another All-Star campaign."

Worded slightly differently, but essentially the same.—Bagumba (talk) 21:41, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Groan. Are we going to be able to fix this mess before the RD nomination goes stale? – Muboshgu (talk) 21:47, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

How low is this percentage supposed to go? Out of curiosity, I ran a check on Derek Jeter, compared to the Internet, because I got it to GA and then FA status by fighting and clawing and rewriting more than I thought was possible over the course of a few years. It comes up as 75.6% with an MLB.com subpage I've never seen before. Jeter's article couldn't possibly be less plagiarized, but there's only so many ways to say "All-Star this, MVP that" in a biographical article. We can't change Malone's career, so how much can we possibly differentiate this from the NBA.com profile? – Muboshgu (talk) 22:26, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

(edit conflict) I don't think I'll be working on this that much more today. My guess is the tool will show a high percentage regardless, which is somewhat expected because both are comprehensive biographies. However, the paragraph structures should have more variance as far as order of content. I got the 1st paragraph in the Atlanta section to have less contiguous red by adding in some new content from another source. My advice would be to work on having less seas of red. The red in itself is going to be unavoidable to an extent, and not necessarily a problem. The key is to void copyvio on the creativity used to create the overall article structure and sequencing.—Bagumba (talk) 22:27, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

I'll do what I can, but in an hour or two at most it'll be up to the judges at ITN. – Muboshgu (talk) 22:36, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

I worded it a little more different. I'm still getting the same results though. - Kiraroshi1976 (talk) 23:37, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Changing a few words here and there is helpful, but it won't reduce that percentage all that much. Prior to his death, it was 97.7%, which shows we have made progress here. Honestly, I don't know how much better it can become, because the wiki article and NBA.com profile need to cover the same important details, more or less. (Speaking of the "less", I'm glad I found those details about his divorce, restraining order, and arrest that NBA.com wouldn't include.) – Muboshgu (talk) 23:44, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Now down to 90.8%, which shows amount of cleanup done. However, I don't think the actual raw number is significant. As we have been discussing, a comprehensive bio is going to have a lot of overlap, with common phrases about stat lines, awards won, and outcomes of playoff series. Looking at the comparisons from Earwig's Copyvio Detector now, I no longer see consecutive sentences or whole paragraphs highlighted in red. These are now short phrases that are matching, and are interspersed throughout non-matching text. I think copyvio is no longer a major concern.—Bagumba (talk) 02:25, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

I was hoping take a stab at paraphrasing things myself, but my internet connection has been wonky. If things start to work more smoothly at my end, I'll see what I can do. Zagalejo^^^ 02:31, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

It seems minor paraphrasing didn't fool Earwig's Copyright Detector too much. Actual text needed to be moved or introduced it seems. At any rate, I don't think it's an issue anymore, but your input is welcome if you find different.—Bagumba (talk) 02:41, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Sadly, I haven't left myself with much time tonight, but I think there's a lot of information that could be trimmed and consolidated. (And not just to avoid copyvio concerns; it would also help with readability.) For example, we don't need to mention each time he made an All-Star team, unless there was something especially noteworthy about a given All-Star game. The player profile section should be sufficient for summarizing such achievements. We don't need to mention every All-NBA selection in the prose, either. A short statement in the player profile section should be good enough. Some of the statistical data mentioned in the prose also seems more important than others; for example, there are various rankings we could do without. Zagalejo^^^ 04:41, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Agreed, it starts sounding redundant when every season mentions another All-Star, All-NBA, rebound leader, etc. First ones are notable, and perhaps seasons where a streak ends or begins, but don't need year by year.—Bagumba (talk) 05:00, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Moses Malone/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:06, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Going to read through this article and will leave comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 20:06, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Malone began his pro career" - professional
  • Fixed. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Early life

• "Mary kicked her husband out due to his alcohol use." - kicked out is informal
  • Does "Mary forced her husband to move out of their home" work better? – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Utah Stars

• Wikilink 1974–75 season to 1974–75 ABA season
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Spirits of St. Louis

• Link 1975–76 season to 1975–76 ABA season
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Buffalo Braves

• "had also acquired power forward Maurice Lucas in the draft and believed they had acquired two players" - reptition of acquired
  • Fixed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Houston Rockets

• "The following season in 1980–81 season," - reword to In the following 1980–81 season,
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• Be consitent in how career high is written as either hypenated or not
  • Hyphens removed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• "Days later on February 11 against the Seattle SuperSonics, " - Nine days later,
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Philadelphia 76ers

• The New York Times should be italized since it is a printed publication
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• "As it turned out" - transpired
  • Changed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Washington Bullets

• Wikilink double-double for non-basketball readers
  • Wikilinked – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Atlanta Hawks

• "had won at least 50 games the prior three season" - had won at least 50 games in the prior three seasons
  • Fixed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• Add a link to Phoenix Suns
  • Added – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Milkawakee Suns

• "reportedly for a $1.6 million salary in the first season and a $2 million salary" - replaced the emboldened text to wage to avoid reptition
  • Changed it to "Malone was reported to earn $1.6 million in the first season and $2 million for the second season" instead – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Player profile

• "and five other times he finished in the top-3." - top three
  • Changed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

References

• References 1, 39, 81 needs the date it was published
• Reference 34 is missing the author who wrote the article and its publication date
• United Press International needs to be added in as the agency for Reference 47
• References 15, 19, 20, 30, 46, 49, 87 & 89 are missing Associated Press as the agency of their respective works
• Reference 76 needs archiving and the date it was published

The prose itself is overall good but some minor issues with it and the references will need addressing before it can have any chance of passing as a GA. MWright96 (talk) 18:55, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I'll get on this in the next day or so. It's possible I may have time this afternoon but I'm not sure. – Muboshgu (talk) 19:01, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Since all of the queries above have been addressed, this article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:14, 8 May 2018 (UTC)