Talk:George Morison Robertson/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Eddie891 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 13:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

I'll take this one on. Eddie891 Talk Work 13:29, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

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I've lightly ce'd, feel free to disagree with any of that or any of my comments below.

  • "absence of Interior Minister Keoni Ana" do we know the reason for the absence?
  • No, possibly traveling between islands or on other business. This is pretty typical in the records for acting ministers.
  • "At the same time, he also served as circuit court judge of the island of Hawaii and police court judge for Honolulu" both for the whole time?
  • That is what the records says.
  • Might be interesting to mention how many seats were in the House, given that he served as speaker, but also might not
  • I am leaning towards not including that since it fluctuate session by session.
  • "first Associate Justice" what does 'first' mean in this context?
  • First individual to hold that position.
  • standardize between calling his spot a "justice seat" and "justice bench"?
  • Changed.
  • Maybe mention the award in the infobox?
  • What field would that be under? Never seen that done.
  • must have been a figment of my imagination... I think it's done in MILHIST
  • Changed.
  • "at the request of" why would a king request someone to change their religion?
  • Kamehameha IV wanted supporters to join the new church.
  • Cite 15 has "archived copy" as its title
  • Changed.

That's about all, very nice work. I'll make a second pass tomorrow

  • File:George Morison Robertson.jpg needs a PD-US tag
  • Added.
  • What makes source #1 a reliable source?
  • I removed it from most of the paragraphs since it was unnecessary. But it is the only one that mentions his parents' name, and that he had seven children, most other sources ignores Margaret Ann Robertson who died really young.
  • [1] should have most of the info about George Humphreys Robertson
  • seven children
  • you can probably remove some of the stuff on James William if you can't find a reliable source for it
  • that should probably allow you to remove the Mini Biographies of Scots and Scots Descendants citations. There's also an oral history where they appear to reference in-hand materials. I know, WP:Interviews, but I just don't think I can promote this to GA with Mini Biographies of Scots... referenced, because to me it's just a web-page with nothing to make it reliable.
  • That should do it. Removed the last one and replace them with better quality sources. KAVEBEAR (talk) 23:43, 9 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • for citation #11, why does it take eight pages to cite one sentence?
  • Each page marks a session of the house and he was speaker for each of those sessions between 1852 to 1859.
  • #16, #19 and #1 are the same source
  • 16 and 19 are difference sources (articles) by the same author.
  • #25 and #4 are the same
  • Difference sources, same website. One is records for son and the other is record for himself.
  • KAVEBEAR: just one more qualm. Eddie891 Talk Work 13:23, 8 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Thanks for responding! I'm satified that this article meets the GA criteria, it's well written, well referenced, illustrated, doesn't contain copyvio and follows the MOS well. Happy to promote! Nice work! Eddie891 Talk Work 00:15, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply