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Tim Hughes (soldier)

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Tim Hughes (soldier) (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs) 6,539 This article is about a decorated Australian Aboriginal soldier of the Second World War who went on to achieve success in the soldier-settlement scheme after the war and was appointed MBE for his inaugural chairmanship of the Aboriginal Lands Trust. Not a lot of corporals with their own articles, but Hughes has his own entry in the Australian Dictionary of Biography. Have at it. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:33, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Hawkeye7

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Great article. Very little to say. Very impressive.

Image review - pass

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All images are appropriately licensed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:01, 29 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - pass

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  • Sources are reliable and reputable
  • No issues with formatting.
  • Spot checks: 3, 8, 32, 33 - okay

Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:01, 29 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Matarisvan

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Hi Peacemaker67, my comments:

  • Perhaps change the "Aborginal" in the first sentence of the lead to "Aboriginal Australian"? I know that the former mostly always implies the latter but a clarification would still help.
  • "at the fifth grade": won't "till the fifth grade," be better?
  • "suffered with": "suffered from"?
  • Can we introduce in 1 or 2 words who Lowitja was in the lead and body, per NOFORCELINK?
  • "made a modest success of farming": "had modest success at farming"?
  • I reckon you would like to take this article to FAC. In that case, you should move around the lead a little so its length is 4 paragraphs instead of the current 3.
  • Why have we linked to South Australia in the body but not in the lead?
  • What was the reason for the first hospital stay in the Middle East?
  • "was recovered": "had recovered"?
  • Link to Wingfield?
  • "made a reasonable success of his farm": "had reasonable success at ..."?
  • Wouldn't the Tim Hughes stadium picture be better placed in the Post war section than in the footnotes?
  • Since we are using the 1993 edition for Wilmot, consider using ISBN 13 instead of 10, as done for all the other sources?
  • Consider adding images of the Battles of Tobruk, the Salient, Milne Bay and Buna Gona? For people who don't have many photograhps, I have seen photos od the events they were involved in being used on here.

A good read overall Matarisvan (talk) 16:36, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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