Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Landing at Nadzab
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Landing at Nadzab edit
- Promoted --Eurocopter (talk) 08:05, 17 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)
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I am nominating this article for A-Class review because... It is a large and important article about one of the lesser-known but more spectacular battles of World World II. And I think it's pretty interesting. Click on the external link at the bottom to watch a video on YouTube. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:28, 6 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Very informative, but still requires a close copyedit. It would also be good to spell out which units were American vs. Australian for readers unfamiliar with the campaign. I expect that it might be a little awkward to phrase gracefully, but it's still necessary. A blanket statement would probably do since the bulk, if not all, of the air units involved were American. Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:00, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- You mean other than by clicking on the links? Sorry, bad taste - of course they aren't going to click on the links. As it happens, the air forces involved did include many RAAF units, although most air units were American. I am puzzled as to why a casual foreign reader would care much. When reading French sources for the Great war, I discovered Australian, American, British and Canadian armies were all lumped together as les soldats anglais without much thought for the tribal differences. I guess I could compile an Order of Battle. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:00, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
- I'll get to more later, but as a preliminary thing, the bullet-points of the C-47 paratrooper loads rather stick out, and would look better integrated into the text, I think; they aren't well-received at FAC, either.
- I'd also suggest checking prose, as this also appears to be something that will increasingly come up in FAC reviews as well. Skinny87 (talk) 12:25, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Harclerode mentions that a series of diversionary operations were conducted to draw Japanese troops away from Lae, and these don't seem to be mentioned in the article.
- And that's all, really; not much for me to get my teeth into with this article, the 503rd didn't do much more than land and set up some roadblocks.
Still, good job so far. Skinny87 (talk) 20:57, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments - (this version)
One external link appears to be dead.Any source for the opening image?File:Short 25pdr.jpg: PD or non-commercial use only?File:C-47 transport planes loaded for Nadzab .jpg: created by the U.S. Army? That's the only tag you need. :)- Bradley (2003) appears in your references section but does not seem to be an in-line citation...
OCLC's for the books would be nice so a reader can find the books in a library near them easily; just type worldcat.org/isbn/########## into your browesr, replacing the #'s with the ISBN.—Ed 17 (Talk / Contribs) 15:18, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]- (Has a look.) Needs work. Took me a couple of goes to figure out that you have to key in your four-digit post code. They believe the Fryer Library at UQ is in Canberra when it's actually at St Lucia, QLD — 1200 km away. (Sent them an email.) It doesn't know about local libraries, just passes you on to the ACT Library service... Keyed in a more difficult book and it told me that the nearest copy is 14,000 km away.
- Somebody put OCLCs in one of the biographical articles but I can't remember which one. Sounds like an obvious job for a bot. (Looks at API doco.) RSS. Should be simple enough. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:22, 7 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support This is another excellent and highly detailed article which meets the A-class criteria. I have a few comments for the article's development which you might want to consider:
- I think that the introduction is a bit too long
- The sentence"This meant that, in the initial stages of the operation at least, the 7th Division would have to be maintained by air" is a bit unclear - this could be changed to something like 'the lack of an overland supply route meant that the 7th Division would have to be initially maintained by air"
- I think that the article would benefit from a comprehensive copyedit before a FAC - I spotted a few typos and missing words, and I suspect that there are more Nick-D (talk) 01:12, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- There's always more... Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:55, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- By the way, I just added a photo to the article, which isn't as famous or clear as AWM 030141/24 but I think that it's more dramatic (oddly, the AWM record says that the gunners are 'relaxing', when at least two of them look terrified!) Nick-D (talk) 01:21, 13 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Support.
- "The 25th Infantry Brigade reaching the town shortly before the 9th Division, advancing on Lae from the opposite direction." That's not a sentence.
- Please move some images left for balance.
- "Transport aircraft controlled by the 54th Troop Carrier Wing, commanded by Colonel Paul H. Prentiss, with his headquarters at Port Moresby." Fragment.
- All minor issues that should be easily fixable. – Joe N 22:54, 14 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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