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Pope John Paul I edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to improve the article to GA or FA status at some point. I've made some improvements, but would like a new set of eye to provide direction to the article. During my first read through of it, I noticed a lot of readability issues, and I've tried to correct for some of that. I've also expanded the sections concerning his early life and tenure as Patriarch of Venice. Any direction provided would be considered helpful! TonyBallioni (talk) 04:24, 30 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Just some notes for you (sorry someone else hasn't reviewed the article).
  • The images are busy at the top of the article.
  • What's the date format? It's mostly dd mmmm yyyy dates, but I also see August 6, 1978.
  • See WP:LAYOUT for the standard layout. I noticed Further Reading, which should go after references, but it's best to check them all.
  • I noticed in the Moral theology there is a statement that starts "It is certain that John Paul I would not...". As not a lot of things are certain, I imagine this is someone's opinion and that needs to be attributed.
  • There are several paragraphs that are unreferenced: take a look at Humanising the papacy, Encyclical on devolution and Personality for example.
  • How big an issue are the Pope John Paul I conspiracy theories? Do they deserve a section? (Just asking)

Sorry this is short, hope it helps. Edgepedia (talk) 13:37, 14 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]