Wikipedia:Peer review/Pigeon racing/archive1

Pigeon racing edit

I rewrote this article a while ago, others have since made minor changes. Any tips on improving it would be greatly appreciated! Abbott75 ☺ 04:37, 12 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Paxse edit

Hey Abbot75, I really enjoyed the article and learned a lot of things I didn't know (God I love this Encyclopedia!). There are a few things that leaped out at me as I read through. I think you probably need a longer lead section (see WP:LEAD) for ideas. That short sentence is a little abrupt for me, I'd like to know more about what else is in the article before I dip my eye down into the next sections.

There is a lot of white space at the top of the article and that handsome bird on the right looks a little lost in the middle of it. Image placement is largely a matter of taste, but I think the vertical shot of birds on the wing a bit further down would look good as the first picture (and a bit closer to the topic of racing).

Some sections, particularly the subheadings under racing by region, are only one sentence long. This is a bit too short. Perhaps combine some of them or (better still) expand those sections with some more info. I enjoy history so I'd like to know a little more about the history of pigeon racing if you're able to expand that section.

Those are a few ideas, hope they're helpful. Cheers, Paxse 17:25, 16 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]