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Fawad Khan is a Pakistani actor who appeares in Pakistani film, dramas and Indian films. I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working to improve it for the last three months. It was promoted to GA but has recently failed FA. I am looking forward to your comments.

Thanks, Amirk94391 (talk) 08:26, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not an expert in these types of article but I already used the archivebot to archive all references so that it would pass a source review. Nevertheless, one issue I found is that the article has some small paragraphs. Remember that writing in Wikipedia is like writing a formal letter. Every paragraph should be balanced and at the same time avoid a reference overkill like "For his role, Khan went through a body transformation.[71][72][73][74]" The body transformation could be further explained too. Good luck with the article.Tintor2 (talk) 19:07, 15 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Tintor2: Thank you so much for your precious time. As you mentioned, I've removed unnecessary and extra citations, merged some small paragraphs and explained body transformation. Amirk94391 (talk) 11:16, 16 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This BLP is no longer a GA. see talk page. --Saqib (talk) 16:12, 16 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]