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I've listed this article for peer review because it has recently undergone major improvements after user Filmman3000 edited it, and I would like to know if it fulfills the GA article criteria.
Thanks, Er nesto (talk) 07:35, 24 May 2018 (UTC)
- A quick, drive-by observation. Why is it written as lots of, very short, paragraphs, often only comprising a sentence or two? I would suggest it be redrafted as longer paragraphs of continuous prose. KJP1 (talk) 10:18, 14 July 2018 (UTC)