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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 20:40:15 13 June 2019 (UTC) [1].

List of national memorials of the United States

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Nominator(s): Reywas92Talk 22:10, 16 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This was originally just going to be the National Park Service units like List of national lakeshores and seashores of the United States but then I doubled my workload with the memorials that are independently operated but don't receive the billing the NPS sites do. Congress is quite inconsistent with naming sites as "national memorials" as they either authorize construction of memorials or commemorative works that may or may not be built or other times name an existing site, so I read a lot of legislation during this project. Anyway I look forward to your comments. Reywas92Talk 22:10, 16 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from BeatlesLedTV
  • Many links need to be fixed; some green some blue, many redirects, and one dead link
  • "The National Park Service manages 30 national memorial as official units." → memorials
  • The link "other national monuments" doesn't go anywhere
  • "Area [9][8]" → remove space
  • You use "U.S." in some instances and "US" (no periods) in others. Make sure it's consistent
  • Why no area for Pearl Harbor?
  • "Thaddeus Kosciuszko" ".02 acres" → "0.02 acres"
  • Center all the image cols
  • Put en dashes in squares with no images

All I got. Great job on this! – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 19:23, 4 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All done. Pearl Harbor is brand new so the NPS Index doesn't have the area but it's the same as the Hawaii portion of the former World War II Valor in the Pacific National Monument. I don't know what the blue ELs are supposed to mean or how to fix the 'connection issue'; I can open those links from the article just fine. Reywas92Talk 07:15, 5 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 07:22, 2 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Not at all convinced you need to bold "National memorial"" in the lead.
    • Done, had that because there isn't a corresponding main article
  • "The National Park Service (NPS), an agency..." This probably needs an {{as of}} as this might change.
    • Added, but this doesn't see very frequent changes and I would expect any changes to be updated.
  • " administers 30 memorials as official units and provides assistance for five " MOSNUM, thirty or 5. I prefer the former.
    • Done
  • do not have the word "national" in their titles. I don't see the importance of this at all.
    • All national parks, national monuments, etc. do include this, and the NPS specifically notes this naming convention [2].
  • " uniquely designated" in what sense? Aren't all these memorials unique?
    • That the Washington Monument is the only one with "monument" in its name despite being a memorial, but I can remove that.
  • "created out of World War II Valor " shouldn't there be a "the" after "of"?
    • Added
  • "The NPS national memorial units are in 15 states" I see no need for "units" here, reads really odd to me.
    • Done
  • "Washington, D.C., has the most, 11, followed by Pennsylvania and New York, each with three." MOSNUM again (eleven/three or 11/3).
    • Done
  • "The historic areas within the National Park System are automatically listed on the National Register of Historic Places." appears to be unreferenced.
    • Done
  • "A few additional units, including Fort McHenry National Monument, " disobeys the rule you gave in the last para of the lead...
    • Not sure what you mean, Fort McHenry is not classified as a national memorial but as a national monument but I can remove the detail
  • Area[9][8] - citations in numerical order please.
    • Done
  • "(8.1×10−5 km2)" not sure scientific notation is appropriate for this kind of list. Hectares would be a more natural conversion.
    • done
  • ".76 acres " consistency with a leading zero please.
    • Done
  • "(0.0 km2)" is a very unhelpful conversion.
    • 0.1 hectares
  • No need to split ref's by 35em, just let the template do it by 30em itself.

That's enough for a first pass. I'll read the notes on each memorial after these are addressed. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:20, 11 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Further

  • "Today there is a reconstructed fort " I would {{as of}} this.  Done This isn't a time-sensitive statement expecting to become outdated... Reworded
  • " during the Civil War and" link Civil War. Every time.  Done
  • "of the Southwest, " link (you link Southeast in the next entry...)  Done
  • "George Washington's inauguration" is piped to a redirect.  Done
  • "Southwest Pennsylvania" why is Southwest capitalised here?  Done
  • "Only a year later" no need for "Only"  Done
  • "of the Constitution and served" Constitution is piped to a redirect. And link it every time.  Done
  • "own of Johnstown, Pennsylvania" comma after Pennsylvania.  Done
  • "UN forces" spell out UN.  Done
  • "in support of South Korea against North Korea" this makes it sound like a football match.  Done
  • You link Grand Canyon but not Gettysburg Address. Be consistent.  Done
  • "36 Doric columns " (a) don't start sentences with a number and (b) I doubt most of the US readers here know what a Doric column is, so link that.  Done
  • Use a consistent number of decimal places in the areas.  Done
  • "The Attack on Pearl Harbor on" I don't think it was a movie title, the A can be an a.  Done Yes, creating a link in the visual editor automatically uses the capitalized article title and I missed the fix
  • "a court-martial " of whom?  Done
  • "integration" is piped to a redirect.  Done
  • Link Church of England.  Done
  • Link American Revolution.  Done
  • "2.7 million Americans " again don't start sentences with numbers.  Done
  • "of soldiers[37]" period?  Done
  • "the memorial is undergoing a" another "as of" moment.  Done
  • "alongside the Allies " I thought they were Allies, not fighting alongside them...?  Done
  • "4,048 gold stars representing the more than 400,000 killed in action." Why 4048?  Done More precise number
  • Link Mariana Islands  Done Added Northern, it's the same link as the location
  • Link Declaration of Independence.  Done
  • "damaging hundred of buildings" hundreds.  Done
  • " 9:01 am " -> " 9:01 a.m. "  Done
  • "The major victory cost the lives of 307 sailors, a destroyer, and an aircraft carrier, but demoralized the Japanese and secured the vital base on the island." this is all a little bit tabloid for me.  Done
  • "killed over 200" more than 200... but 200 who?  Not done Do I really have to say the word "Navajo" a third time in this sentence?
  • "Part of National Mall and Memorial Parks" odd incomplete sentence. Maybe start with "It is..."?  Done
  • "More than 150,000 troops " Allied troops, not just the implication of that many US troops.  Done
  • You link missing in action but not killed in action.  Done
  • "USS Indianapolis (CA-35)" is probably a more interesting link that "heavy cruiser".  Done; it was the same article as the memorial name
  • What is VFW?  Done

The Rambling Man (talk) 20:32, 19 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "The affiliated areas are in four states (two additional)" - not sure what "two additional" means here, similarly for "five additional" later......
  • "a white granite wall engraved with the named of the 40 victims" - typo on what should be "names"  Done
  • "Notable quotations.....are etched on granite walls and a 30 ft (9.1 m) sculpture of King" - are quotations actually etched on the sculpture as well as the walls, or are there some words missing here?
  • "The majority of victims were Black" - don't think "black" needs a capital B
    • [3] Not sure if the MOS addresses this
  • "having been exileed" - typo  Done
  • "what's left of the building's walls " => what is left....  Done
  • "are surrounded by Wall of Honor" => "are surrounded by a Wall of Honor"  Done
  • "This is first museum dedicated to veterans" => "This is the first museum dedicated to veterans"  Done
  • That's all I have....... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:04, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:33, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed, minor changes only. Promoting. --PresN 20:40, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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