Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Preuss School/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was not promoted 04:25, 3 February 2008.
Preuss School edit
This is a self-nomination for an article that failed to be promoted in November, here. Then, the only objection that was not acted upon were multiple calls for a copy edit. Since that nomination, SandyGeorgia supplied me with a number of MoS changes to make, which I did. More recently, Finetooth did a complete copy edit of the text and made some reference recommendations. Now that both of these processes is complete, I am unsure on how to further improve the article. Hence, I am here once more. SorryGuy Talk 00:00, 14 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
ConditionalFull support Find a substitute reference or references for the items supported by<ref name="Warren"/>, which deadlinks, and I'll be willing to switch to full support. Ameriquedialectics 17:41, 14 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- That was actually a format error, when I removed the www. there was no conflict with .doc and it can now be opened. SorryGuy Talk 03:07, 15 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Ok, looks good to me,
but if I were to edit that google doc. and save it that wouldn't affect the source text would it? Not that I'd be one to try that.Ameriquedialectics 05:15, 15 January 2008 (UTC) Nevermind, I had google docs set as my default doc. opener. Ameriquedialectics 05:19, 15 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments: I see some stylistic issues; why not just "Student life" instead of "Preuss student life", and "Dr. Doris Alvarez" should just be "Doris Alvarez" per WP:NCP. The article should be moved to "Preuss School UCSD" or "Preuss School" -- per WP:NCD the school doesn't consistently refer to itself with integral definite article 'The', nor does the press[1], or even the district. [2] – Zedla (talk) 20:49, 19 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I made the first two changes and agree that the needs to go, and am leaning towards Preuss School, even if I was the one that moved away from that title nearly two years ago. Anymore input before doing so is welcome, though. SorryGuy Talk 22:50, 19 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comment: How is "Preuss" pronounced? I'm guessing "pryce", but "proos" and other mangled-Alemannic options come to mind as well, and "proyce" would probably be more true to its apparent heritage. An IPA guide would help. RossPatterson (talk) 00:41, 20 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Please review the unresolved external links. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:19, 22 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I have lost home internet and may get it back soon. In the meantime, though, if anyone could help me out here it would be great as my time is short. The school rhymes with choice. SorryGuy Talk 16:46, 24 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments
- There are several paragraphs that are wholly are almost completely unsourced. I'd like to see documentation on which classes the students are required to take. (Two paragraphs in the Academics section)
- Need a citation for the fact that the school switched from trimester to semester "to improve the quality of its students' college applications"
- In the clubs section, you need citations for the fact that over 200 students stay late and that Robotics is popular
- Do you have more information on what the organ donation club does? I assume they aren't donating organs ;)
- Would an urban dance league really be considered a "more traditional club"? Perhaps there is a better way to describe these clubs?
- The Classic Cars for Classic Kids information seems overly detailed to me. Do we care which place they rent, how many donars are invited, that the organizations give presentations, and how much each person is asked to donate?
Good luck! Karanacs (talk) 16:52, 28 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]