Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Conan (2007 video game)
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 01:29, 22 August 2008 [1].
Conan (2007 video game) edit
- Nominator(s): User:Jappalang
- previous FAC (01:14, 6 August 2008)
For this nominated article, Conan, did you know that ...
- Conan was designed to be as faithful to Robert E. Howard's literature as possible?
- the visual style of Conan was based on that of Frank Frazetta's portrayals of the barbarian and the Hyborian world?
- Arnold Schwarzenegger, who played Conan in the 1982 film, is backing a law to regulate the sales of Conan and other M-rated video games?
With your attention captured, please take a look through this comprehensive article (reliably sourced to boot) on the video game and judge its suitability to be a Featured Article. Thank you. Jappalang (talk) 07:52, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support All my concerns were ironed out at the last FAC, and subsequent peer review before the renom. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs (talk) 12:10, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments - sources look good, all links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:17, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Pending support - I only have some very, very nitpicky issues with the prose, some of which are highly debatable. I haven't looked at the Development and Reception sections yet, though. —This is part of a comment by Nousernamesleft (of 00:39, 15 August 2008 (UTC)), which was interrupted by the following: [reply]
- "To defeat the boss, players have to complete interactive button-pressing sequences after Conan has inflicted heavy damage on it." - I would assume that the damage is inflicted before the key sequence, but that doesn't support this type of sentence structure. Something like "After inflicting heavy damage on the boss, blah blah blah...".
- In the previous FAC, User:Laser brain said that there should be a clear distinction between the player and the character (Conan); there should be no mixup between their actions. In this case, Conan (and not the player, though under the player's control) attacks and damages the boss, but it is the player who has to press the buttons in a sequence to defeat the creature. There is particular difficulty in fitting a leading clause without getting mixed up between the subjects. In any case, I have reworded this statement into three and hopefully, it is clearer now in its meaning. Jappalang (talk) 01:34, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I agree that "After inflicting heavy damage ..." would be the most graceful construction, but given Laser brain's requirement, I think Jappalang has done a good job. here --AnnaFrance (talk — blunders) 13:01, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Fair enough. Nousernamesleft (talk) 21:20, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I agree that "After inflicting heavy damage ..." would be the most graceful construction, but given Laser brain's requirement, I think Jappalang has done a good job. here --AnnaFrance (talk — blunders) 13:01, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- In the previous FAC, User:Laser brain said that there should be a clear distinction between the player and the character (Conan); there should be no mixup between their actions. In this case, Conan (and not the player, though under the player's control) attacks and damages the boss, but it is the player who has to press the buttons in a sequence to defeat the creature. There is particular difficulty in fitting a leading clause without getting mixed up between the subjects. In any case, I have reworded this statement into three and hopefully, it is clearer now in its meaning. Jappalang (talk) 01:34, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- "The inspiration for Conan's moves came from several sources, chief among which was Frazetta's artwork." - I'm not sure this is grammatically correct. In any case, it certainly reads very awkwardly.
- You use commas extremely sparsely; this decreases readability in several areas. I recommend that a look be taken at this.
- Are there any outstanding examples? I have also asked AnnaFrance, the copyeditor of the article, to help me take a look at this. Jappalang (talk) 01:34, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Usually the complaint is about too many commas and I spend a lot of time removing them. Can you point out the areas you don't like? --AnnaFrance (talk — blunders) 13:01, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Interesting, I swear I had some, but can no longer find them. Anyways, it's not that big of a deal. Nousernamesleft (talk) 21:20, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Usually the complaint is about too many commas and I spend a lot of time removing them. Can you point out the areas you don't like? --AnnaFrance (talk — blunders) 13:01, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Are there any outstanding examples? I have also asked AnnaFrance, the copyeditor of the article, to help me take a look at this. Jappalang (talk) 01:34, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Nousernamesleft (talk) 00:39, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
One last comment: "Although architectures of the two consoles were very different," - should that be "the architectures"...? Nousernamesleft (talk) 21:20, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- I am not certain either. Would it be redundant if we insert a definite article before "architectures"? Can anyone offer help on this? Jappalang (talk) 23:55, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Good catch, Nousernamesleft. I'll make it so. --AnnaFrance (talk — blunders) 12:56, 16 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support—There might be a couple of minor issues with some of the text, but overall this article has addressed the issues raised during the first FAC. I think it covers the subject nicely and satisfies the FA criteria.—RJH (talk) 19:48, 18 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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