Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Ashutosh Tewari/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 05:35, 10 August 2008 [1].

Ashutosh Tewari

Nominator(s): Nmishra9 (talk)

I'm nominating this article for featured article because Ashutosh Tewari has hit the news hard recently, and the general public would definitely be interested in reading about is phenomenal success with robotic surgery within the past few years. Wikipedia serves to showcase notable people who achieve outstanding things in life — Tewari's page will show everyone just that. It was on my user subpage until a few hours ago, but there shouldn't be any issues with it. Thanks for your consideration. Nmishra9 (talk) 05:31, 9 August 2008 (UTC)Nishant Mishra[reply]

Oppose. First thing I looked at was the references. As weird as that may sound, it stands that references must be correctly cited as per WP:CITE. Basically, the references need to be listed completely with author name, publisher, date of the article, and the access date it was found. Also, some articles are lacking references all together. For a quick example:

The 'Research papers' section completely lacks references. It could/may be possible to find at least a few (for a start) number of references verifying his published research papers.

"Receiving his medical education from Ganesh Shankar Vidyarthi Memorial Medical College (GSVM) in Uttar Pradesh, India, Tewari graduated with honors in 1984. He received his training in urology from Sanjay Gandhi Post Graduate Institute of Medical Sciences (SGPGIMS) in India under the mentorship of Professor Mahendra Bhandari and completed the program in 1991." Source?

"Tewari completed his urology residency at the Vattikuti Urology Institute (VUI) of the Henry Ford Hospital in Detroit, Michigan in 2004. He received his urologic oncology training at the University of California, San Francisco in 1994, the University of Florida in 1998, and the VUI in 2004." Source?

And some others.

Further, please re-read the Wikipedia:Featured article criteria and make comparisons. The prose and layout could do with a bit of work. I'm not really in support of the massive list of published works.

Consider this statement - "His research ranges from the study of patient outcomes, robotic techniques, molecular markers for cancer aggressiveness, racial disparity in cancer biology, quality of life studies, strategies to improve nerve sparing and sexual function recovery, and anatomic studies to facilitate continence preservation to the development of next generation robotic techniques [22].". This sentence is way too long for my liking, and most readers will undoubtedly have a troubled shortage of breath and understanding when trying to read it. Instead of simply listing all of them, you could have sentences which end a bit more frequently and elaborate slightly on his exact role of research in that area (if any).

Please also re-consider the lead. It seems that it doesnt quite follow the standard criteria. Make sure that the lead summarizes everything in the article. No new content should be suddenly introduced if not mentioned in the lead. Make separate paragraphs in the lead where applicable and include information on his earlier education etc in there.

And not that it is a strict criteria or necessity, it seems that there is not a worthy amount of media on the page. Although the main image is the most important, further media could be used. And you need to make a caption on the main image. Although, such things look difficult since the article is fairly short. Consider possible expansion is the best advice I can offer you. Hope this helps. Domiy (talk) 06:11, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Strongly Oppose Please withdraw this FAC immediately. Not even a single reference has publisher, accessdate, author information. Clearly not satisfying WP:CITE. His website is [2] a deadlink. look at the Robotic prostatectomy para, I don't know what relation it has with Ashutosh Tewari. More than 50% of the text are just bullets (awards, research papers etc..). This article is still not ready. I think the nominator didn't read the Featured article criteria properly. This article has not even gone through peer reviews. That's why, please withdraw. Kensplanet^Talk_E-mail^{Contributions} 10:10, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Helpful sample featured articles are Frank Macfarlane Burnet and Michael Woodruff. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 18:29, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: It's currently at "Good article nominations". Axl (talk) 19:49, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I removed that, since it was submitted first to FAC. If the nominator wants to withdraw from FAC, it can be resubmitted to GAN. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:54, 9 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Question: How can I withdraw the article so that it can then be submitted to GAN? Thanks.--Nmishra9 (talk) 02:52, 10 August 2008 (UTC)Nishant[reply]
I will withdraw it now. Please leave the {{fac}} template in place, per WP:FAC/ar until the bot comes through, and you can nominate it to GAN after that. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 05:33, 10 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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