User talk:Samuelzhao000005/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Sydneycurrie5

Overall the information is good. Citation can be improved by using cite button. Maybe use more neutral language when summarize what you found in the source and get rid of the pronouns. ChristalCao (talk) 18:11, 30 March 2019 (UTC)Reply


The information is great, but beware of using "I" in a wikipedia page. Koko413 (talk) 23:44, 31 March 2019 (UTC)Reply

Again, avoid using "I" in the article. Also proofread for grammar errors. --Jasonkung22 (talk) 21:03, 31 March 2019 (UTC)Jasonkung22Reply

You should change a few of the sentence structures, some of them are clunky.SocksOfDeath (talk) 15:51, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

You do a really good job of remaining fact based but i think you need to edit some small grammatical errors and sentence structures. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wohlina (talkcontribs) 15:54, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply


The information is fact-based and interesting! Make sure to reread it qs there are a few missing letters and some sentences could be improved for clarity. For example, try rephrasing "Because of the quickly born out of the food delivery system" to something that is a bit more clear. Also, instead of writing about the article and referring to it, use citations and footnotes. Lorenaramirezl (talk) 16:00, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Great job so far. I would recommend adding your outside sources. I am sure you used some sort of outside source so be sure to cite it. This will provide more validity to your article. Great information so far, keep up the good work! Jaredgoz (talk) 16:10, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Your page is really fact based and goes from broad to specific which is good! However, there are some grammatical errors that could be fixed but overall it looks good! Isabelleshegog (talk) 16:21, 3 April 2019 (UTC)IsabelleReply

I liked the topic of instant noodles. You forgot to add a hyperlink to the page that you're editing and you didn't add any citations. You should add the citations instead of writing "the first article...). The text is factual-driven and just need correction on these mistakesRafamatalon1234 (talk) 01:15, 4 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

I find your topic to be very interesting! The information you included seems very detailed, but, I would suggest maybe adding some citations/outside sources. Fariha34 (talk) 02:58, 4 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Very interesting sandbox. I enjoyed understanding how instant noodle sales decrease. To improve, I would check sentence structures, grammatical errors etc.Charlier118 (talk) 23:47, 5 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Good job! Add some more citations if you can! Sydneycurrie5 (talk) 20:41, 7 April 2019 (UTC)Reply