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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:45, 27 March 2019 (UTC)Reply


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Hi! I have some notes for you:

  • One of the sources is a study, which poses an issue since studies are primary sources for any of the research or conclusions created by its writers, who are typically the ones who conducted the research. The issue here is that the publisher that puts out the work doesn't verify the work or put the findings in a wider context, nor do they provide commentary. They only check to make sure that there are no glaring errors that would invalidate the study's findings. An independent secondary source that reviews/covers the study in some context needs to accompany the study if it is to be used. This source would review the findings and say whether or not the findings are accurate, often by comparing it to similar studies. They will also help provide context, which is definitely necessary with studies as they're limited out of necessity. Most researchers won't have the time or personnel to survey all people or check out every possibility, so the study's findings are at best only really true for the people who participated. For example, a study's findings can differ greatly depending on who they survey - someone living in California may have a different response than someone in New York or Florida might. Socioeconomic backgrounds also play large roles in responses as well.
The essential gist of this is that if you are to use the study you need to find a secondary, independent source for it. The other source, the book chapter, is an excellent source to use. However in good news, keep in mind that you can use some film websites like Den of Geek
  • The section needs to be more specific in what it's addressing. This looks to be addressing gender stereotyping in viewership of film genres, so it would be good to tweak the first sentence to more directly state this. Maybe something like this?
Gender stereotyping is considered to be a prominent issue in society, which can be reflected in who is considered to be the target audience for a given movie genre.
This sort of gets to the point straight away.
  • This is definitely optional, but something I would perhaps look into if you have the time and energy would be how genders are stereotyped within film. For example, women are often depicted as being the caregivers and nurturers. They're often put into a role where they're supportive and typically non-threatening in some manner. Those that go outside this stereotype run the risk of being depicted as "monsters" or villains unless they undergo some sort of character growth that makes them take on positive gender stereotypes. A good example of this in action would be when Black Widow talked about being sterilized as a child and calling herself a monster. Some people took exception to the idea that Black Widow would call herself a monster for being unable to become a mother, as this type of thing doesn't make one a monster. Whedon responded that this wasn't what she was referring to exactly, but this still raised some ire. I'm digressing, but there's definitely merit to discussing gender stereotyping in film genres, especially as there are some stereotypes that are unique to a given genre, such as the idea of the final girl. This goes over this concept fairly well.
You don't absolutely have to create this second subsection since I know it's coming close to the end of the course and this would be extra work, but it's something I wanted to run across you. This is kind of just me being a film nerd.

Other than the first two notes (the second is me nerding out about your topic), this does seem to be OK otherwise. Always make sure that you write in Wikipedia's formal style (something I usually say to everyone).

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2019 (UTC)Reply