Your submission at Articles for creation: sandbox (February 13)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by DoubleGrazing was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
DoubleGrazing (talk) 09:42, 13 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hi @DoubleGrazing and thanks for your quick reply!
I know the page might seem comparable to Iveco's and therefore to be included in it, but Iveco is the brand page and the one I'm submitting is the group one. I've noticed that there are other companies that have both group and individual brand pages, such as CNH industrial with Case IH and New Holland (and the creation of Iveco Group is also a result of a demerger from CNH Industrial).
In addition, the Iveco Group page already exists in Italian and I believe it could be useful to have it translated into another language such as English, both because it is a well-known company and because it has industrial sites in Europe, North America and South America.
The group may be 'young', but other sections could be added to the page to make it grow.
What do you think?
Thanks again MarcoTruck (talk) 16:10, 15 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
Okay, I hear you, although I'm not entirely convinced – delineating between the brand and the corporate entity is often tricky. What I'm happy to do is to revert my review, and leave it for another reviewer to assess; that way your draft at least gets the benefit of a second opinion. -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 16:18, 15 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
 
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AfC notification: Draft:Iveco Group has a new comment

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Iveco Group. Thanks! microbiologyMarcus (petri dish·growths) 17:52, 15 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hi @MicrobiologyMarcus and thanks for your feedback, I saw your comment but Iveco is just one brand out of eight of the Iveco Group. Shouldn't the group have its own page? Like for CNH Industrial and its brands? Especially when it already exists in another language?
Thank you ---- MarcoTruck (talk) 16:21, 16 February 2024 (UTC)Reply
I see your point. As an aside, ensure that the links in the infobox to those subsidiaries are correct. Some looked like a mistake or point to a DAB page so I assumed that the main corporate structure was only notable (see WP:Notability) because of the flagship brand. microbiologyMarcus (petri dish·growths) 16:28, 16 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Iveco Group (February 16)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by Robert McClenon were:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
Robert McClenon (talk) 18:43, 16 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Iveco Group (February 24)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Johannes Maximilian was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.

Johannes (Talk) (Contribs) (Articles) 19:56, 24 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi @Johannes Maximilian, thanks for your feedback. I updated the draft including sources only from third parties (the most reliable I could find), removing all the press releases. Do you think that now the article could work? MarcoTruck (talk) 08:14, 28 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

AfC notification: Draft:Iveco Group has a new comment

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Iveco Group. Thanks! Johannes (Talk) (Contribs) (Articles) 19:23, 7 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Iveco Group (March 18)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Greenman was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
Greenman (talk) 17:11, 18 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hi @Greenman, thank you for your feedback. I followed your indications and removed the "history" paragraph. As for the formal and neutral tone of the article, I have tried to be as neutral as possible, including only verified facts and information and following the form and content of the Italian version of the Iveco Group page already published on Wikipedia. Do you still find promotional terms?
Thank you --- MarcoTruck (talk) 08:40, 21 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Your submission at Articles for creation: Iveco Group (July 4)

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Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by SafariScribe were:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.
Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 10:10, 4 July 2024 (UTC)Reply