Bebelong
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editHello, Bebelong, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Adam and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:29, 28 February 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review on Connected Toys
editHey, this is cookiestan! Below is my peer review of your Connected Toys draft.
- In general, you need to include more citations to your work.
- For your first paragraph, I can see places where you can be more concise and effective with your wording like "form of smart toy that can connect" (more active wording would be better)
- Make sure to be consistent with upper case and lower case of the information that can be attained from connected toys in the information collection section.
- Under privacy related issues, the concerns section, correct grammar is necessary, so a suggested edit would be "people are concerned that children's information is not secured properly".
- I would love to see the privacy laws that pertain to the data collection of these toys and any examples of violations of these laws.
- I see that you have notes taken for the second half of your section, and I think it would be wonderful to see you expand from the topics that you've chosen and write about them in complete sentences!
- Make sure to include peer-reviewed sources for research on your article- I looked up independent.ie, and it seems to be popular media as it is a British online newspaper. If you have more questions about the criteria of reliable sources, Naniette is wonderful to talk to.
- In general, it seems like you have a broad idea of the topic, and I can't wait to see what you do with the little examples and details for this topic.
- You've done a good job and keep up the good work. Continue to expand and dive deeper into the topic.
Introductions from Classmates
editI have just finished trainings from week 1 and now am trying to practice by saying "hi" on your talk page--Strillonator (talk) 02:41, 18 September 2017 (UTC)
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