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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:35, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
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Puaaiki edit
Bartimeus L. Puaaiki
- ... that Puaaiki (pictured), the blind preacher of Maui, was a former hula dancer for King Kamehameha II?
- Reviewed: Long Military Service Cross (Spain)
Created by KAVEBEAR (talk). Self-nominated at 07:18, 30 November 2016 (UTC).
Long enough and recent enough. FindAGrave is not a reliable source from what I know, and the other sources use "Blind Bartimeus" rather than "Blind preacher of Maui". The source does not say anything about Puaaiki not being ordained, seems like - and some sentences look like close paraphrases to me. Otherwise, no issues with POV or copyright. Hook is short enough, moderately interesting and sourced inline to one reliable source (the other one is questionable, as said above). Image seems good to me, almost certainly out of copyright by now. QPQ is done, I think. Finally, not important for this review as it's not part of the criteria for DYK, but probably worth noting, the article lacks the diacritics/symbols that Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Hawaii-related articles recommends for Hawaiian words. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:26, 30 November 2016 (UTC)
- @Jo-Jo Eumerus: Can you point out the specific sentences problem with the close paraphrasing? It is hard since I am not writing in details and using citations to cite one sentence for very basic information. Rewriting a sentence in your own word is basically close paraphrasing. Since Kekela was the first Hawaiian ordained minister in 1849, Puaaiki was the first to be licensed to preach but because he died in 1844 he was ordained. The diacritics are used in the article. The policy doesn't speak about the article title which I believe should just remain without diacritics like an early Hawaiian convert Henry Opukahaia...The nickname "blind preacher of Maui" is founded in a lot of later publications about the life of this figure. I've cited an early 1842 mentioning of him as the blind preacher of Maui, so we can use it in the hook. In the hook, I did not specifically mentioned it as a nickname but as a qualifying description of the figure (i.e. he was blind, he was a preacher and he was from Maui). I've removed all citations from the introduction and incorporate that part in the article body since overacting the introduction is not advised. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:05, 30 November 2016 (UTC)
- Comment I copy edited the article. Now at least, Earwig's copy violation detector doesn't show any close paraphrasing, other than proper names and titles. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 02:53, 21 December 2016 (UTC)
Some sources I cannot read, but the others look fine. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 10:08, 21 December 2016 (UTC)
