Template:Did you know nominations/Emil Tamsen

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:41, 15 May 2014 (UTC)

Emil Tamsen

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Emil Tamsen (1862-1957)

Created by Philafrenzy (talk), Edwardx (talk), Leutha (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 23:22, 28 April 2014 (UTC).

  • New enough, long enough, well-sourced, and neutral. QPQ complete. Image free and displays well. Although the hook is technically in policy, it is too long and disjointed (covers too many subjects) in my opinion. Can it be shortened/tightened? I have a couple of suggestions, all of which directly tie to source 5:
ALT1: ... that although Emil Tamsen (pictured) fought for the British in the First Boer War, he became a friend of the Boer leader Paul Kruger?
ALT2: ... that philatelist Emil Tamsen (pictured) acquired treasure after treasure?
78.26 (I'm no IP, talk to me!) 14:52, 15 May 2014 (UTC)
  • I tidied the article a bit. Alt 1 looks good to me. Philafrenzy (talk) 15:53, 15 May 2014 (UTC)
  • I'm happy with ALT1 too. Edwardx (talk) 17:53, 15 May 2014 (UTC)