- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:27, 3 July 2013 (UTC)
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Heladería Coromoto edit
- ... that you can buy British Airways at an ice cream store in Merida, Venezuela?
Created by Bonkers The Clown (talk). Self nominated at 06:20, 24 June 2013 (UTC).
- Comment: I am glad to see improvement relative to earlier noms in the use of a reliable source (BBC). I will leave a full review to others, but note that the hook is cited to a reliable source. However ... The article is incorrectly named: Coromoto is a common term in Venezuela (example, Our Lady of Coromoto) and it is doubtful that Coromoto should not direct to the better known uses, or at least to a dab page. This article should be Heladería Coromoto. Also, Lonely Planet (a tour guide) isn't a particularly high quality source (I've encountered errors there about Venezuela): this text:
should at minimum be attributed ("Lonely Planet Venezuela calls Coromoto "the most famous ice cream parlor in South America"). Opinions should be attributed. A copyedit for basic English grammar is needed. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 14:12, 24 June 2013 (UTC)Coromoto is now cited as "the most famous icecream parlor in South America"[3]
- Sorry, don't speak Venezuelan, had no idea what "Coromoto" meant. I shall move the page accordingly. Lonely Planet writes "icecream" not "ice cream". Perhaps I should include a "[sic]". Alright, shall make the changes requested. ☯ Bonkers The Clown \(^_^)/ Nonsensical Babble ☯ 14:44, 24 June 2013 (UTC)
- What, my basic grammar can't be that horrible, right? ☯ Bonkers The Clown \(^_^)/ Nonsensical Babble ☯ 14:48, 24 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you for renaming the article: I've set up the missing dab page and the redirect for diacritics. A couple of things: American (not British) English is used in Venezuela. I can find no indication the store is a chain, so I removed that. We don't use words like "current" or "now" on Wikipedia (see MOS on Precise language [1]), I've attributed the opinions, and I've done a basic copy edit for grammar and to remove numerous redundancies (for example, things like "a total of" are almost always redundant, there are others). [2] If you ever need help on Venezuela topics, please do not hesitate to ping me (although I'm often too busy to weigh in adequately). I do not know if this article meets expansion criteria, but we should avoid saying the same things three or four times. Regards, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:58, 24 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you... It's still within the 5 day creation deadline, so it will pass... 1506 characters, nice enough. Okay, I'm sorry for those redundancies... ☯ Bonkers The Clown \(^_^)/ Nonsensical Babble ☯ 01:37, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you for renaming the article: I've set up the missing dab page and the redirect for diacritics. A couple of things: American (not British) English is used in Venezuela. I can find no indication the store is a chain, so I removed that. We don't use words like "current" or "now" on Wikipedia (see MOS on Precise language [1]), I've attributed the opinions, and I've done a basic copy edit for grammar and to remove numerous redundancies (for example, things like "a total of" are almost always redundant, there are others). [2] If you ever need help on Venezuela topics, please do not hesitate to ping me (although I'm often too busy to weigh in adequately). I do not know if this article meets expansion criteria, but we should avoid saying the same things three or four times. Regards, SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:58, 24 June 2013 (UTC)
- What, my basic grammar can't be that horrible, right? ☯ Bonkers The Clown \(^_^)/ Nonsensical Babble ☯ 14:48, 24 June 2013 (UTC)
- Comment: I am glad to see improvement relative to earlier noms in the use of a reliable source (BBC). I will leave a full review to others, but note that the hook is cited to a reliable source. However ... The article is incorrectly named: Coromoto is a common term in Venezuela (example, Our Lady of Coromoto) and it is doubtful that Coromoto should not direct to the better known uses, or at least to a dab page. This article should be Heladería Coromoto. Also, Lonely Planet (a tour guide) isn't a particularly high quality source (I've encountered errors there about Venezuela): this text:
Article's too short. It's so barely over the word count that it's really just a wikicup nom to try and get as many points as possible without regard to article quality. Wizardman 21:27, 26 June 2013 (UTC)
- What? Too short? I've already tried to make it as long as possible, and as you can see, it's above the criteria of 1500 chars. ☯ Bonkers The Clown \(^_^)/ Nonsensical Babble ☯ 03:22, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
