Talk:W. Webber Kelly

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Sportsfan77777 in topic GA Review
Good articleW. Webber Kelly has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Good topic starW. Webber Kelly is part of the Green Bay Packers presidents series, a good topic. This is identified as among the best series of articles produced by the Wikipedia community. If you can update or improve it, please do so.
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April 9, 2019Good article nomineeListed
April 1, 2024Good topic candidatePromoted
Current status: Good article

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:W. Webber Kelly/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 05:12, 8 April 2019 (UTC)Reply


And this one. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:12, 8 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Lead edit

  • Same comment: I would just link "Green Bay Football Corporation" to "Green Bay Packers, Inc." and get rid of what is in the parentheses.
  • Also same comment: I don't think Board of Directors should be capitalized, and it should be "Packers' board of directors".

Early life edit

  • Patrick Kelly was a member of the British Army ===>>> His father was a member of the British Army.
  • He completed some post-graduate work in Vienna, Austria before moving to America in 1903. ===>>> He completed some post-graduate work in Vienna, Austria before moving to America in 1903. He took a post-graduate job in Vienna, Austria in surgery and medicine before moving to America later that year.
Can you clarify this one? Did you accidentally repeat the original sentence? I also don't like the second sentence as the source uses "work", not "job". Job implies actual pay, whereas post-grad work usually entails some blurring of lines of a job versus an internship. Since the source isn't clear, I prefer to stick with "work". « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:49, 8 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
Okay, that's fair. I don't think the source is using the right terminology, but that's on them. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:31, 9 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Medical career edit

  • In 1914 he was admitted to the American College of Surgeons and completed more post-graduate work in surgery and medicine in London, England. ===>>> In 1914, he was admitted to the American College of Surgeons following more post-graduate work in London, England.

Green Bay Packers edit

  • the Packers would have still had to pay the Duluth team ===>>> the Packers would have still needed to pay the Duluth team
  • Board of Directors capitalized
  • In 1929, he was elected (add comma)
  • Kelly resigned as president ===>>> After the season ended, Kelly resigned as president
  • then replacing Kelly as team physician ===>>> then removing Kelly as team physician (OR add who he replaced him with)

Personal life edit

  • Good.

Overall edit

  • No dab links.
  • All of the links work.
  • No bare refs.
  • Image seems fine.

Solid overall. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:53, 8 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for another review Sportsfan77777! Everything done except the one noted above. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:49, 8 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
Passed! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:32, 9 April 2019 (UTC)Reply