Talk:USS Maine (BB-10)/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this done soon JAGUAR 22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: - not to be a bother, but I wonder if you've forgotten about this? Parsecboy (talk) 13:39, 20 July 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry! I've been held up by a FAC this week, but I'm going to finish this review now. JAGUAR 13:47, 20 July 2015 (UTC)
- No problem, it happens to me all the time ;) Parsecboy (talk) 16:35, 20 July 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry! I've been held up by a FAC this week, but I'm going to finish this review now. JAGUAR 13:47, 20 July 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
edit- "Maine served in the Atlantic for the entirety of her career with the North Atlantic Fleet" - what about the Great White Fleet? Were they separate?
- The "Great White Fleet" was just a nickname - the actual unit was still the Atlantic Fleet
- The lead summarises the article well, so this meets the criteria
- There are inconsistencies with "in" and "inch" in the Description section
- Fixed.
- "Armor that was 6 in thick" - this needs a metric conversion
- It's converted in the paragraph above, for the secondary battery
- "Following their arrival, Maine was assigned as the flagship of the 3rd Squadron" - if it served as a flagship twice then this could be a worthy mention in the lead
- Added a line on that.
- "She returned to service on 15 June 1911 for service with the Atlantic Fleet" - repetition of "service", it might be better to rephrase this to something like She returned to active duty on 15 June 1911 for service with the Atlantic Fleet
- Fixed.
References
editOn hold
editSorry for the delay in reviewing this, I've been very busy lately! The points again are very minor and won't take long to address, as all of the battleship articles I've reviewed are compact and in excellent shape. JAGUAR 14:27, 20 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for promoting them! This article meets the GA criteria - another one to the collection JAGUAR 23:03, 20 July 2015 (UTC)