Talk:USS Maine (BB-10)

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

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I removed the "more footnotes" template as all sections now have inline references. --Darrend1967 (talk) 00:53, 7 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:USS Maine (BB-10)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)Reply


I'll have this done soon JAGUAR  22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Jaguar: - not to be a bother, but I wonder if you've forgotten about this? Parsecboy (talk) 13:39, 20 July 2015 (UTC)Reply
Sorry! I've been held up by a FAC this week, but I'm going to finish this review now. JAGUAR  13:47, 20 July 2015 (UTC)Reply
No problem, it happens to me all the time ;) Parsecboy (talk) 16:35, 20 July 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • "Maine served in the Atlantic for the entirety of her career with the North Atlantic Fleet" - what about the Great White Fleet? Were they separate?
    • The "Great White Fleet" was just a nickname - the actual unit was still the Atlantic Fleet
  • The lead summarises the article well, so this meets the criteria
  • There are inconsistencies with "in" and "inch" in the Description section
    • Fixed.
  • "Armor that was 6 in thick" - this needs a metric conversion
    • It's converted in the paragraph above, for the secondary battery
  • "Following their arrival, Maine was assigned as the flagship of the 3rd Squadron" - if it served as a flagship twice then this could be a worthy mention in the lead
    • Added a line on that.
  • "She returned to service on 15 June 1911 for service with the Atlantic Fleet" - repetition of "service", it might be better to rephrase this to something like She returned to active duty on 15 June 1911 for service with the Atlantic Fleet
    • Fixed.

References

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On hold

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Sorry for the delay in reviewing this, I've been very busy lately! The points again are very minor and won't take long to address, as all of the battleship articles I've reviewed are compact and in excellent shape.   JAGUAR  14:27, 20 July 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for promoting them! This article meets the GA criteria - another one to the collection   JAGUAR  23:03, 20 July 2015 (UTC)Reply