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Reviewer: Destroyeraa (talk · contribs) 20:22, 22 January 2021 (UTC)Reply


I will do this review.

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Met history

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  • An ex cyclone is a frontal system. Change frontal system to "frontal boundries."
  • near the France–Spain border → "near the borner with Spain." Sounds more natural that way.
  • Remove Quinn produced heavy rainfall in northern Italy, leading to floods in the region. We're talking about Rolf's MH here, not Quinn's impact. This shouldn't belong in the article as Quinn is not Rolf (could warrant an article of its own if necessary).
  • De-link frontal structure. WP:OVERLINK.
  • and as the storm slowly moved eastward, it triggered flooding in the Balearic Islands.[5] More impact info that should go into the impacts section.
  • "organized" - British English?
  • convection began to increase in the storm → "and convection, or thunderstorms, associated with the storm expanded." Link atmospheric convection to convection. Things Noah likes to pick on :)
  • stationed above the Massif Central in southern France Am I reading this correctly? Rolf was stationed over land this whole time?
    • Um, actually, Rolf was positioned over the Massif Central area at the time; it wasn't stalled there the whole time. I meant to point out the location. Anyway, I changed the wording to make it more clear. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 00:10, 23 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • bringing additional flooding to the region.[9][5][10] Rm
  • During that evening, Rolf spawned a tornado over Alassio, in northern Italy, causing some structural damage.[11] Interesting stuff that belongs in the impacts.
  • On 7 November, Rolf turned westward and slowly transitioned from an extratropical system into a subtropical depression over the abnormally-warm waters of the Mediterranean Sea,[5][12] which were at 17°C (63°F),[13] with the system acquiring a warm quasi-symmetric core, and with organised convective rainbands wrapping around the center of the storm.[9] Sentence is too long. You should know how to fix it.
  • (the NRL) → (NRL)
  • Remove , shortly after completing its tropical transition.
  • NOAA noted that deep convention had persisted around the core of Rolf long enough to officially declare the system a tropical storm. I thought it was already a TS. NOAA already said it was a TD. Conflicting information...
    • Uh, Rolf went from a extratropical low to an SD, then a TD, and then a TS. I've revised the two sentences concerning these transitions to resolve this issue. The sentence in question now reads: "Late on 7 November, soon after Rolf had completed its tropical transition, the system increased further in organization and strengthened significantly in the process, with the NOAA noting that deep convention had persisted around the core of Rolf long enough to officially declare the system a tropical storm." LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 00:10, 23 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Consequently, both the Satellite Services Division and NESDIS of the NOAA classified the system as Tropical Storm 01M. The Satellite Services Division is Nasa or Noaa? If it's NOAA, then just put NOAA.
  • Around that time, Rolf brought heavy rainfall to parts of the nearby countries in Western Europe, including northern Italy and northeastern Spain. Rm.
  • On the same day, Rolf reached its peak intensity, attaining a minimum central pressure of 991 mb (29.3 inHg) and maximum 1-minute sustained winds of 82 km/h (51 mph; 44 kn).[14][9][15] I thought 85 km/h, 50 mph. Also, remove knots from the entire MH.
  • Rolf began to weaken on 9 November, as it encountered more hostile conditions, with the storm's convection decreasing and its upper- and mid-level circulation centers becoming misaligned, as the system moved closer to the French coastline. → Rolf began to weaken on 9 November as it approached the French coastline due to hostile conditions, with the storm's convection decreasing and its upper- and mid-level circulation centers becoming misaligned.
  • Subsequently, the NOAA issued their final bulletin on the storm, as Rolf was expected to dissipate soon,[14] Do we need this sentence?
    • Technically, the sentence isn't essential, but from a meteorological standpoint, it is significant in that the NOAA chose to terminate their bulletins at that point. I revised the sentence and merged it into the previous one to make it flow better, in conjunction with a revision to the following sentence (which you commented on below). LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 00:10, 23 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • with the storm weakening to 1,015 mbar (30.0 inHg) around the time of its landfall.[5][17] Later that day, Rolf made landfall on the island of Île du Levant and soon afterward, made another landfall near Hyères, in Southeastern France,[7] weakening rapidly upon making its second landfall.[9] I suggest you rewrite these sentences to make it clearer. Incorporate the mbar with the landfall sentence.

That's all for the MH. Some work for you to do. ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 20:22, 22 January 2021 (UTC)Reply

Excellent. Let's move onto the preps and impact.

Preps and impact

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  • From 6–8 November, the storm dropped a total of 600 mm (23.62 in) of rain in about 72 hours over southwestern Europe. This should be more specific. In what country?
    • The original source does not specify which country the rainfall total occurred in. However, I suspect that this is a maximum rainfall value for France, given a similar figure later in the article, so I have specified it as such. I also added the second source that was used later in the article. However, there is a contradiction between the two sources. The EUMETSAT report claims that the 600 mm rainfall total occurred over a 72-hour period from 6–8 November, while the highest reported maximum total from the French source is 605 mm over a 9-day period, from 1–9 November. Given this discrepancy, and given the fact that I was unable to find another local report corroborating the rainfall claim in the EUMETSAT report, I decided to go with the local report from the French sources for this value. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 00:36, 27 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The storm caused at least US$1.25 billion (€925 million) in damages, in France and Italy. Remove ",in France and Italy." Spanish damage? Swiss damage?
  • On 16 December 2011, the NOAA declared that they would no longer be monitoring storms in the Mediterranean Sea, for reasons that the agency did not publicly disclose.[19] However, in 2015, the NOAA resumed services in the Mediterranean region;[20] by 2016, the NOAA was issuing advisories on a new tropical system, Tropical Storm 90M.[21] This whole thing is interesting but doesn't belong in this article. It should be located in the Medicane article.
  • Prior to Rolf, northern Italy had already experienced a period of heavy rainfall during the first few days of November, due to a previous extratropical storm, Quinn,[22] which was later worsened by the additional rainfall brought by Rolf.[22] → "In northern Italy, saturated grounds due to heavy rainfall from Storm Quinn worsened flooding caused by Rolf, which hit the region a few days later." How does this sound? The previous sentence was a bit too long.
    • Changed the sentence to "In northern Italy, saturated grounds due to heavy rainfall from Storm Quinn in early November worsened the flooding later caused by Rolf, which began inundating the region on 4 November." LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 21:54, 25 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The cities of Genoa and Recco in Liguria, in northern Italy suffered some of the worst impacts from the storm in the country, with Rolf's extratropical precursor initiating a period of prolonged rainfall, which began on 4 November. This sounds a bit redundant, since you already talk about Quinn and the worst-hit cities. How about just include Recco in the bunch and delete this sentence.
  • What's leftward-flowing?
  • Link severe thunderstorm to severe thunderstorms.
  • Gipuzkoa—a province in Basque Country– Uneven dashes.
  • Replace Gipuzkoa with "The autonomous community" in its second mention.
    •   Done. Technically, Basque Country is the autonomous community, and Gipuzkoa is only a part of it. I modified one of the previous sentences to improve the clarity as well.
  • 300 litres (79 US gal) of rainfall in parts of the autonomous community,[36][37] We don't use gallons. That's for volume. We use ml and inches.

Ok, that's all. ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 20:39, 25 January 2021 (UTC)Reply

Source review

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Only one thing -

The first source is a dead link. However, it can be removed as it is backed up by NOAA sources. ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 17:48, 4 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

  Fixed I added in the archived link. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:56, 4 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

Final

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
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    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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  7. Overall:
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Congratulations on your first GA! ~ Destroyeraa🌀🇺🇸 18:57, 4 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

Sweet!! Thanks! ^_^ LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 19:01, 4 February 2021 (UTC)Reply
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