Talk:Toronto Blue Jays mascots
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Albacore in topic GA Review
 | Toronto Blue Jays mascots was a Sports and recreation good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake. | ||||||||||||
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 | A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on February 3, 2012. The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that BJ Birdy, the first mascot of the Toronto Blue Jays, also starred in a Toronto Star comic strip created by the mascot's performer? | ||||||||||||
| Current status: Former good article nominee | |||||||||||||
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Birdy forgotten edit
http://www.google.ca/search?client=opera&rls=en&q=birdy+site:toronto.bluejays.mlb.com -- Zanimum (talk) 20:31, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 01:02, 25 January 2012 (UTC)
The article overall dearly needs a copy-edit. Specific examples:
- Examples of unnecessary bolding of the specific mascot names in the lead and elsewhere.
- The lead does not satisfy WP:LEAD in that it doesn't adequately summarize the article.
- The third note could be merged into the article.
- Not sure if the fourth note is necessary.
- Quickly, some in the sports media asked "Double the pleasure? Or, double the pain?" Not neutral
- Not sure if the commons category is necessary since the two photos in it are being used in the article.
- The lead image 'sandwiches' the text. The image should be reduced in size
- Images need alt-text
- The usage of quotes is too abundant, cut the unimportant ones.
- Overall the article isn't focused on the topic. For example, in multiple areas, the text strays into Shanahan's life, and adds unnecessary detail (i.e the article strays into Shanahan's cartoon unnecessarily, and On the move to SkyDome, "BJ Birdy" told the Star that the team should keep prices as is. is likewise unnecessary).
- Parts of the article have peacock terms
- Parts look like original research, or if not, it's not neutral (i.e The team suggested, if it were too hard to hold onto the costume, the Jays Care Foundation would gladly accept a donation; he flatly refused. "gladly accept a donation" is not neutral, and neither is "flatly").
- Get the article copy-edited (someone at Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors might give the article a copy-edit) and re-apply for Good Article status, as there's potential for this article to be a nice little GA. For the meantime, I'm failing the nomination due to its prose standard. Albacore (talk) 02:27, 25 January 2012 (UTC)