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graffiti
editI just noticed this page has been graffiti'd all over today. I'm not an editor and I don't know how to stop it, but maybe someone could lock the page. I don't want to revert everything only to have it all go back. Just look at his stats (right now it says he has like a 1.0 ERA or something) or that he was the world junior poker champion. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.155.108.66 (talk) 05:07, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
- Request for semi-protection has been made on Wikipedia:Requests_for_page_protection Bagumba (talk) 23:40, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
Untitled
editShouldn't there be something about his recent drug arrest and plea to possession of drug paraphenalia in exchange for having the drug charge dropped? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.61.133.134 (talk) 21:22, 7 November 2009 (UTC)
call up???
editSo when are the Giants going to call this kid up?--E tac 07:01, 1 May 2007 (UTC) Who knows, they will probably do it once Morris or Ortiz show some kinks. All I know is I can't wait for him to get the call and help me win my fantasy title! "We're just going to have to use our brains."............."Damnit." 16:40, 1 May 2007 (UTC) Hah yeah I was wondering because I picked him up in fantasy after his first couple of minor league starts, pitching has been killing my teams this year and he could help turn that around when he finally does make the big club. I hope he makes it up before the all star break.--E tac 08:11, 3 May 2007 (UTC) Well, now the guy is finally up in the Big Leagues, what do you think? Montira warran 15:52, 15 June 2007 (UTC)montira_warran
- He's a stud.--E tac (talk) 05:52, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
Pitch speed
editWas it a case of 100MPH on the stadium gun, but 98 on ESPN? The gun at The Park is notoriously unreliable... Js farrar 00:18, 11 May 2007 (UTC) Normally the park guns ar acurate but the tv stations are juiced but who knows.--E tac 06:55, 11 May 2007 (UTC) I watched his entire outing against the Rockies (in Colorado and not on ESPN) and he threw 96 mph fastballs for 5 innings straight--slippyfoster Pretty much all radar guns are unreliable when it comes to pitching. It mainly depends on where the gun is picking up the ball. The ball loses speed as it travels to the plate. So the closer to the release point the gun picks up the ball, the faster the pitch speed will be. You could get two different readings on the same pitch if one gun is picking up the ball sooner than the other. I would be very suprised though if Lincecum can throw his 2 seam fastball at 100 MPH like the article says. 4 seamer, ok. But throwing a two seamer that hard is pretty much impossbile because of the way you have to throw it. You can get as much velocity behind it.
Comments
editThis is a very well done article for a good young pitcher. It has many more sources than a lot of other baseball articles of players who have been around much longer (see Reggie Jackson for example). My only concern though is that the whole major league section is taking on a game-by-game log feel. Even if he only manages to stick around a few years, this will become very long and cumbersome. I can see having a whole paragraph on a very important game, but routine starts and no decisions probably don't warrant such attention. When the season is over, all this info can probably be condensed down into one or two paragraphs summarizing his tendencies (pitch speeds, etc...) and accomplishments throughout the whole season rather than on this is a game-by-game basis. The major league section could then be fleshed out with the info from the trivia section. If you try to nominate this for GA some day, the trivia section will be the first thing they'll suggest to remove as trivia sections are frowned upon in peer review. I hope this helps. This article, like the pitcher it's about, has a lot of potential. I wish more baseball articles would get this much attention. Great work so far. 75.191.200.21 01:24, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
GA Review & why article is on hold
editOn Hold because: Before I get to the review, I only need one change to the article before I approve it for GA status: Please remove the “Awards & Accomplishments” section from the body of the text. Instead, leave mention of the Golden Spikes Award right where it is in the Infobox, and then incorporate both the strike out and Baseball America lines into the body of the text (preferably somewhere in the “Minor Leagues” section). When this has been done, please leave me a message on my talk page, & I'll approve the article right away. Thanks! As for the review:
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
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- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
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- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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Overall, this article is great. Most importantly, the references are immaculate; there are many different reliable sources utilized, and are properly formatted in the reference section...excellent work! I also liked the inclusion of quotes from other players, because it went a long way toward breaking the text up, and in addition really livened it up. While I only need the Awards section incorporated before I approve the article, I also have other suggestions that might help the article:
- cite a reference for his accomplishments in high school
- if at all possible, try to get a freely-licensed picture where you can see his face well
- Under the “Major Leagues” section, put all the text currently there under a sub-section labeled “2007”; that way you’ll be ready to add more info for the 2008 season (and beyond!)
- I would also recommend combining the Draft & Minor Leagues section under their own new level 2 heading, and giving the Major Leagues section it’s own level 2 heading.
- Keep an eye out for any references that could be used to give more insight into his personality and off the field life; don’t feel constricted to just documenting what happens on the baseball diamond
Hope you find this review helpful. Just make the change I listed at the top of this post; I look forward to approving the article for GA status! Monowi 07:19, 12 November 2007 (UTC)
- Congratulations on the article passing its GA nomination! Monowi 23:02, 12 November 2007 (UTC)
- This article is written with a fair amount of peacock language, thus should not be presently considered for GA status. Maybe that can be put right, but till that day comes..... Hushpuckena (talk) 20:15, 23 October 2013 (UTC)
Good source
editLincecum winds up a fan of old-school music. Includes stuff on personal life, which article needs.User:calbear22 (talk) 09:23, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
SI article
editThe July Sports Illustrated Lincecum cover article has a wealth of information that could be added to not just this WP article but others as well. I hope to incorporate the material soon. I can see that the web edition is linked; I'm surprised no one's taken a crack at it yet. dfg (talk) 17:03, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
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Upwards of 90 MPH?
editLincecum throws upwards of 94-95 MPH, significantly more in baseball terms than 90 MPH. That section should be fixed to more accurately reflect his velocity. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.238.152.194 (talk) 18:28, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
- Lincecum rarely breaks 92 MPH now, so the statement that he throws 95 MPH in his pitch repertoire is a little misleading. He also rarely, if ever, throws a four-seam fastball. In fact, I suggest that whole section be re-written. Acordova (talk) 20:50, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
- The existing text is using a Nov 2008 reference. Suggest edits and provide references. Assuming the previous information was correct at the time, the existing text should stay and new information should be added as a change in pitching style over time. Bagumba (talk) 21:08, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
Personal Life
editLincecum is half filipino from his mother's side. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.3.97.84 (talk) 18:51, 1 November 2009 (UTC)
Controversy
editHow come there is no mention of his marijuana possession incident?
- I was gonna ask the same thing... --67.134.239.205 (talk) 15:32, 5 May 2010 (UTC)
Only an American could care about something so trivial. It's only marijuana for fuck's sake.
- Only?Lestrade (talk) 23:59, 15 December 2010 (UTC)Lestrade
Lousy infobox photo
editThat has to be the worst picture of Tim I've ever seen. There has to be a better picture available. Toddst1 (talk) 20:59, 6 May 2010 (UTC)
- I'm trying to find or take a better picture myself, but with the season over it may be a little tricky. I'll try and take one myself at the 2011 FanFest. Acordova (talk) 20:55, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
Have you guys ever seen him pitch?
editI saw him once--he beat the Cubs. I think Bobby Scales got the only hit off of him. Lincecum pitched a hell of a game--granted it was the Cubs. But, man he was good. May I include my experience seeing Lincecum pitch against the Cubs. I think it probably fits somewhere! —Preceding unsigned comment added by 98.206.138.33 (talk) 00:10, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
- No, because that's Original Research, which violates policy on WP. Argel1200 (talk) 23:05, 2 November 2010 (UTC)
Edit request from Srajakumar, 5 November 2010
edit{{edit semi-protected}} I intend to add some information regarding Tim Lincecum's personal life. The details will be referred from reputable sites. As an example I submit the following link. http://www.jockbio.com/Bios/T_Lincecum/T_Lincecum_bio.html
Thank you
Srajakumar (talk) 20:06, 5 November 2010 (UTC)
- If you provide the verbatim text you want added along with the citations annotated, it can be considered for addition. Bagumba (talk) 23:16, 5 November 2010 (UTC)
- Since there's no edit request here yet, I've deactivated the template. Feel free to readd the template if you have a specific request to change the article text. — Gavia immer (talk) 04:39, 6 November 2010 (UTC)
Edit request from 67.160.220.165, 12 November 2010
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67.160.220.165 (talk) 00:01, 13 November 2010 (UTC)
citation needed: for lincecum setting all time strike out record over first 4 seasons in mlb.
See MLB website article dated 9/30/10 titled: Stat Speak: Lincecum, A-Rod join elite company by Roger Schleuter
Done - reference added, thank you for finding a source for that claim. — Gavia immer (talk) 00:09, 13 November 2010 (UTC)
Unorthodox mechanics
editInstead of a continuous delivery, he interrupts his motion by extending his arm behind his back. Then he performs a quick, strained overhand pitch.Lestrade (talk) 00:03, 16 December 2010 (UTC)Lestrade
- You're reacting to what you see. His delivery is in the legs, not the arm (as Andrew Baggarly puts it, his arm is "just along for the ride"), powered by the stride and follow-through. His command of his pitches throw after throw despite the head turn in the windup comes from his dominant left eye, which stays on the target, something most righties simply cannot do, and his amazing coordination. The arm extension is just one of a series of "mechanics" needed to needed to bring the ball to the release point without telegraphing the pitch to the batter.--Reedmalloy (talk) 18:37, 9 April 2011 (UTC)
mother not from filipino immigrants
editHis mother's great grand parents were filipino immigrants. Whatzinaname (talk) 11:08, 14 April 2011 (UTC)
"Out" pitches
editIn the second paragraph, it states that Lincecum uses his changeup to strike out lefties while using his slider to get out righties. Is there stated somewhere as fact? PitchFX has trouble picking up the differences between Lincecum's change-up and slider, so unless we have a citation for this I don't think it should be stated. Acordova (talk) 20:27, 27 June 2011 (UTC)
Bias on drug charge
editThe article states that his drug charge came with "additional coolness." While I may think that it was impressive that he could pitch well in the midst of receiving a drug charge, I do believe that "additional coolness" should be removed, for it is clearly too biased for a neutral article.
His Father
editEdited article to remove the part about his father being an ex-minor leaguer who stopped playing because he broke his back. Couldn't find any information on this. Added an edit that correctly says that his father is reponsible for his baseball interest as well as his windup (he was a type of coach for lincecum in his youth and even today to an extent) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 99.231.242.151 (talk) 00:24, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
Necessary?
editSomebody reverted my edit where they restored the " " stuff; can someone explain to me why? --96.242.163.228 (talk) 10:18, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
GA Reassessment
edit- This discussion is transcluded from Talk:Tim Lincecum/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the reassessment.
The article fails WP:GACR 1b as it lacks a comprehensive lead. By appearances alone, it might not have grown much since it was promoted in 2007, as there is no text on his career accomplishments despite a long list in his infobox. The lead currently only mentions his current team, his nickname, and trivial mentions of his body measurements.
Also, there are numerous tags in the article for citations needed or possible original research, possibly failing GACR 2b and 2c. All issues have been tagged and unresolved for over a month.—Bagumba (talk) 21:07, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- From a quick look at the article, I do agree that there are a number of ways this article would need to be improved to be kept as a GA. I think it's doable, though. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:23, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- Agreed. Unfortunately, if it wasn't for a GAR, nothing might get done here. I was shocked by the lead for a GA of someone of Lincecum's caliber.—Bagumba (talk) 21:28, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- Sometimes, pressure is necessary. I don't really understand the GA review that listed this article in the first place, granted it was five years ago. Details have been added for every season, though perhaps not in the methodical GA manner necessary.
- I took a first stab at the lead, but it could surely be longer. I'll try to read through the body soon. ``– Muboshgu (talk) 21:36, 7 August 2012 (UTC)*Disclosre:
- Disclosure: This is the first GAR I ever started. Apparently, I get the "honor" of closing this also (I am finding out now). My initial intent was to point out the problems I found so far and leave it to an admin from there. That not being the case, I agree with your assessment that the article details are "perhaps not in the methodical GA manner necessary" aside from the glaring problems I initially reported. Be prepared for more comments after the initial ones are addressed. More citations can be added aside from the ones already tagged.—Bagumba (talk) 22:48, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- Agreed. Unfortunately, if it wasn't for a GAR, nothing might get done here. I was shocked by the lead for a GA of someone of Lincecum's caliber.—Bagumba (talk) 21:28, 7 August 2012 (UTC)
- I don't know how long these are supposed to remain open for (never participated in one), but I don't think I have the time to fully engage with this article right now. Nobody else has stepped up to the plate yet either, so I don't feel optimistic about the outcome. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:31, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the heads up. WP:GAR only says "Allow time for other editors to respond." I'll give it another week at least for someone new to step forward.—Bagumba (talk) 22:17, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
- With no further progress on the lead or adding needed citations, I am delisting from GA.—Bagumba (talk) 23:33, 29 August 2012 (UTC)
- His pitch repertoire section could use an update, as well. This is a self-labeled specialty of mine, so perhaps I will give it a look. --Jprg1966 (talk) 05:34, 14 September 2012 (UTC)
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Recovery from current injury
editPlease add details of his current injury that is currently keeping him out of the major leagues. This is important enough to include a sentence in the Intro section.
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Semi-protected edit request on 20 May 2016
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Pitcher for the Los Angeles Angels od Anaheim 2601:244:4601:3445:E032:4D78:AEC:E561 (talk) 03:04, 20 May 2016 (UTC)
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Please add Los Angeles Angels to Tim Lincecum's list of teams, below San Francisco Giants, for the MLB 2016-2017 season.
The Los Angeles Angels signed Tim Lincecum for 1 year contract. Official team press release: http://m.angels.mlb.com/news/article/179226832 2607:F720:F00:4043:CCD:2D5C:27FF:B55F (talk) 19:25, 20 May 2016 (UTC)
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Early life detail graffiti
editHello, I am not an editor but it looks like someone updated the early life section to say Tim attended South Harmon Institute of Technology (SHIT) which is a reference to the made up school in the movie Accepted.
- Thanks. Fixed that. EricEnfermero (Talk) 22:45, 31 July 2018 (UTC)
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Lede
edit- comma after "from 2007 to 2015"
- WL to first instance of Cy Young Award
- list specific years of the "five-year span"
- start of second para is awkward
- pipe Washington Huskies to Washington Huskies baseball
- don't need to specify "Washington" Husky after first instance
- the framing of his build looks awkward
- WL no-hitter
- don't need to mention WS wins here if the years are mentioned in the first para
Early life
edit- move information about his parents here, specifically the part about his father and the draft
- should State Player of the Year be capitalized? Genuine question, link is dead
- specify Kingco 3A and WL to Kingco Athletic Conference
- mention here that he was drafted but chose to attend UW
- pipe UW reference to Washington Huskies baseball
- "as a Washington Husky" is redundant
- "He won" → "He was the recipient of"
- any stats from his summer with the Mariners?
San Francisco Giants
edit- move draft info and minor league career under the Giants subhead, as that all happened within the larger organization
- Changed instead to "Draft and Minor League Career" section, which allows the San Francisco Giants section to focus on his time in the major leagues. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:47, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "He signed for a $2.025 million signing bonus on June 30, which at the time..." → "His $2.025 million signing bonus was, at the time, ..."
- day of his professional debut
- Tough to find dates for minor league games. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:49, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Going into the 2007 season"
- move Ian Stewart quote to pitching style section
- I think it's better here, as it speaks to what type of pitcher Lincecum was in 2007. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:49, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "In five starts (31 innings)" → "In 31 innings across five starts with the Grizzlies,"
- "one run, 12 hits, and 11 walks while striking out 46 batters"
- MOS says that numbers above ten are given numerically
- I changed it, but that's actually not true. From WP:MOSNUM: "Integers greater than nine expressible in one or two words may be expressed either in numerals or in words (16 or sixteen, 84 or eighty-four, 200 or two hundred). When written as words, numbers from 21 to 99 are hyphenated (including when part of a larger number): fifty-six or fifty-six thousand but five hundred or five thousand." Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:52, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- MOS says that numbers above ten are given numerically
- "Lincecum struck out the highest percentage of batters ..." → "Lincecum struck out 30.9% of batters, the highest of any minor league pitcher in the previous ten years."
Rookie year
edit- "With an injury to the Giants' fifth starter, Russ Ortiz" → "After starter Russ Ortiz suffered a [specify injury]"
- "Lincecum was called up from Fresno" → "the Giants called Lincecum up"
- "In his first career inning, Lincecum struck out three batters," → "Lincecum struck out three batters in his first inning"
- WL Colorado Rockies
- They are already linked earlier in the article. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:41, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- first sentence of second paragraph is awkward/redundant
- name the day of his first win
- "He faced the Houston Astros in each of his next two starts" → "His next two starts were against the Houston Astros
- specify dates
- "After recording a no decision in the first game, Lincecum returned
- don't need his July-only stats
- We should leave those in. It is impressive to win every decision in a month. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:44, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "he struck out twelve" → "he recorded 12 strikeouts"
- WL Chicago Cubs
- They are linked earlier in the article. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:45, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "while throwing only 88 pitches"
- "shut down for the season" → "benched"
Consecutive Cy Young Awards
edit- first paragraph somewhat unclear
- was May 15 his first start for the season?
- "Lincecum appeared on the cover"
- "because he was hospitalized the day of" → "after being hospitalized the day of"
- Better the way it is-he might have still been hospitalized during the game.
- "He recorded his 252nd strikeout of the season, breaking Jason Schmidt's [insert year] single-season strikeout record"
- wording on the 265 strikeout sentence could be clarified
- "He finished 23rd in that year's NL MVP voting"
- What day was his first 2009 loss, and against what team?
- Lots of redundancy in the middle paragraph
- Struck out a member of the Nats at Nationals Park
- struck out Guzman for his 500th career strikeout
- second-to-last paragraph: second to who?
- "since coming up to the big leagues" → "in his major league career"
- why did he miss the start?
First World Series championship
edit- combine first two sentences
- "In June, he stopped walking so many hitters" → "By mid-June, he recovered his stride,"
- It's more specific the way it is. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:23, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- WL MLB All-Star break
- WL pitchers' duel
- "pitched eight innings of one-run ball" → "gave up one run in eight innings"
- "At the end of the season, Lincecum won his third ..."
- "In his next postseason start, Lincecum outdueled fellow Cy Young winner Roy Halladay"
- The "Game 6" line reads a tad dramatic
- WL to first base and third base
- "scamper back safely" feels more sports-journaly than encyclopedic
- Scamper is a perfectly appropriate member of the English language that captures what happened. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:27, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- WL double play
Setting records
edit- WL to New York Mets
- "becoming the Giants franchise holder ..." → "surpassing Hall of Fame 'first five' inaugural member Christy Mathewson as the Giants franchise record holder for ..."
- I decided it made more sense to keep it the way it had been phrased, but I broke it into two sentences so it wasn't as long. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:19, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- "While Mathewson accumulated his 28 ten-plus-strikeout games in 551 starts over 17 seasons with the Giants, Lincecum recorded 29 such games in 129 starts over five seasons."
- "threw a three-hit shutout against the Oakland Athletics"
- "striking out Jerry Hairston Jr. → "against Jerry Hairston Jr." (if you're recording your 1,000th strikeout, it's assumed that you struck out the batter in question)
- "despite having the fourth-lowest ERA in the NL, including a second-half ERA of 2.31, Lincecum finished the 2011 season with a 13-14 record."
- WL run support
- "leading to Lincecum becoming" → "making Lincecum"
Second World Series championship and career downturn
edit- switch first two sentences
- who did he play on the 23rd and 28th?
- "and did not win again until he threw seven shutout innings against the Los Angeles Dodgers on June 22.
- Reads better the way it is now-other makes for kind of a long clause. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:50, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Santiago Casilla blew the save, but ..." → "closer Santiago Casilla gave up two runs in the 9th inning, but the Giants won 3-2."
- "Lincecum pitched better" → "Lincecum improved"
- the whole second paragraph reads fairly awkwardly as-is and can probably be restructured
- "won 8–3, forcing a deciding Game 5"
- That's not really correct grammatically. It's better as it is now. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 04:17, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
Third World Series championship ...
edit- "program that would improve his coordination"
- mention the insanely high spring training ERA!
- WL Bumgarner
- "became the pitcher of record" → "was credited with the win", possibly?
- No, he was not credited with the win until after the game, whereas he immediately became the pitcher of record when the Giants took the lead. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:45, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Lincecum was the only member of the Giants' 25-man playoff roster not to play in the NLDS and NLCS."
- "started the season ... by May 3" reads oddly
- WL cortisone
Los Angeles Angels
edit- "pitched six innings of one-run ball" → "gave up one run in six innings"
- mention the opposing team and day of his other win
- what day did he accept an option to return to Salt Lake?
- "even though major league rosters expanded" → "when major league rosters expanded"
- I think even though is better - it highlights the fact that the Angels could have called up Lincecum without bothering to make room for him, and they chose not to. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:43, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- WL the expansion to Major League Baseball rosters#Expanded roster
- specify if his 2-6 record is overall for the season, or only in the majors
- "after the season" → "at the end of the season"
- After is better because players don't become free agents until early November, about a month after the regular season has ended. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:42, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
Texas Rangers organization
edit- day of his signing needs a ref
- the Star-Telegram ref is not an official announcement, but rather a rumor
- "Jon Daniels, the Rangers' general manager said ..." → "Rangers general manager Jon Daniels said ..."
- "due to a blister ..." → "after suffering a blister on his right middle finger during spring training"
- when is "eventually?"
- Unknown; dates of specific minor league games are difficult to track. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:08, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- "in an interview at the ceremony"
Pitching style
edit- start with "From the age of four" sentence
- "Sportswriters Bob Nightengale and ..." → "Lincecum's pitching technique has drawn comparisons to Oswalt"
- Wikipedia seems to prefer more specificity with these sort of statements; see Template:Who. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:58, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- "breaking curveball which broke away from" is redundant
- clarification needed on his primary two pitches, as there are three listed (two kinds of fastballs and a curveball)
- WL Batted ball#Ground ball
- add km/h conversions to all the mph figures.
- "His other pitches, which were typically in the TKTK range, also slowed slightly as his career progressed."
- I think overall a lot of the quotes from batters he's faced could go in their own section here
- With this one, I'd prefer to keep them where they are, in order to show what time period they were made in. The Lincecum of 2008 was not the Lincecum of 2014. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:05, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
Career highlights
edit- specify that National Freshman of the Year award came from the Collegiate Baseball Newspaper
- WL to Players Choice Awards
Personal life
edit- the sentence beginning "Lincecum has lived in Sausalito, California ..." is somewhat confusing
- include year of the Sacramento Bee thing
- "since Joe Montana" doesn't have to be in quotes
- WL Fox Sports
- I feel like "because of his athletic abilities" is not the full story behind his nickname
- replace "driving 74 mph in a 60 mph zone" with "speeding"
- "discovered the pitcher with 3.3 grams of ..." → "found 3.3 grams of marijuana in the pitcher's possession"
- It's better the way it is now, because then "still illegal under state law at the time" comes directly after what it modifies. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:53, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- "A 2010 This is SportsCenter commercial featured ..." → "Lincecum appeared in a 2010 This is SportsCenter commercial, ..."
References
edit- Copyvio score looks decent at 39.4%
- reference 2 is dead
- reference 4 only lists his MLB stats, not NCAA
- It actually lists the NCAA stats too, but you have to click an icon for them to come up. I added a note of how to do so in the citation, since people frequently miss this. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:13, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- I don't love reference 8. It borders on WP:OR, as it's primarily about Villalona's signing bonus, with assumptions that can be extrapolated to Lincecum
- reference 9 does not indicate that Lincecum was "frequently" named the organization's top prospect
- Took out the sentence altogether, since one of his prospect ratings is cited a couple of sentences later. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:10, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- reference 10 (NYT) does not mention anything about the Volcanoes or Lincecum's minor league debut
- reference 18 does not match up with the information to which it is attached. Its placement suggests that it's about Lincecum's two games against the Astros, but it links to his MLB debut against the Phillies
- reference 141 (Zillow) is dead
- since I don't have the book onhand, I'm going to take your word that all those citations are correct
- there are areas that seem to border on overlinking, such as the sentence about his mother being the child of Filipino parents, where the San Francisco Chronicle article adds nothing to the Manila Times citation.
Stability
edit- Checked Revision history says that, save for one IP vandal on February 19, there's no edit warring or other instability.
Images
edit- Checked All images are free use and appropriately placed within the article.
Overall comments and verdict
editGA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- There are some confusing sentences and paragraphs, largely detailed above.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- Apart from some general MoS issues (like when to use numbers or written words), the biggest issue is tone, which occasionally dips into resembling a sports news piece rather than an encyclopedia.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Reference formatting looks good.
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- There are a few permanent dead links, as well as references that do not actually cite what they're linked to. Some overlinking as well.
- C. It contains no original research:
- A borderline case.
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Tone issues mentioned above are not obviously biased, but could stand to be improved.
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
On hold until all issues are fixed. Kncny11 (shoot) 02:44, 2 March 2021 (UTC)- All my comments have been addressed, so I think it's time to pass this baby! Kncny11 (shoot) 05:13, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail: