Talk:Sorga Ka Toedjoe/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Drmies (talk · contribs) 03:51, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Crisco, why'd you trim the second image? Drmies (talk) 03:54, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
  • Focus on Roekiah and Landauw, otherwise it would be unclear at thumbnail size. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:02, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
    • Well, I guess I could stand this (with full image). Looks a little long though. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:06, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
      • What I like about the "longer" image is the name of the movie in it, and its lively background. The shorter one fits the text better, I'll grant you that. Up to you. Drmies (talk) 04:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
• Can you rephrase "extensively featured"? It sounds like K-pop writing. Moreover, the 30 October 1940 review praises the music and says it was supervised by Kartolo--the latter point is worthwhile mentioning in the lead since he has an article and was a songwriter as well. It notes that several other actors came from the "world of music"--I think that's enough for a sentence or two in the Production section. [Update: wait, you have that covered to some extent with "Roekiah, Kartolo, Landauw, and Titing were experienced kroncong singers." So nevermind, I suppose--"NVM"?] Drmies (talk)

• Done, and expanded anyways. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

• Remove your "sic" in note c: is it the spelling of "tafereelen"? That's normal for the time, a double e for an open syllable with a long e. Drmies (talk) 04:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

• Done, and yes that was the issue. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)

• I am well pleased. Congratulations, good work. Someday the government of Indonesia will give you a medal. Drmies (talk) 05:04, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, good Doctor. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:18, 11 June 2013 (UTC)