Talk:Ladysmith Black Mambazo/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Hamiltonstone in topic GA Reassessment
GA Reassessment edit
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This review has been initiated as part of the sweeps project.
The article is neutral in tone and well-written. It's main problems are:
- insufficient in-line citations, particularly in the sections beginning with subsection "2008-present". All this material needs much better referencing. Every award received needs a source, or a source needs to be provided at the head of the table if they are all able to be found in one source.
- the order of sections seems strange. I would have expected "membership" to be the first, or one of the first, sections, while the LBM Foundation section should be one of the last.
- it is not clear why the material on touring is separate to the chronological history of the group. Some of it repeats points already made in the history, highlighting the problem. I suggest removing the main "history" heading, make the time periods main-level headings, integrate all touring info into that framework, and delete the "touring" section altogether. This will improve flow and eliminate repetition.
The one image is in order (I checked the original Flickr licensing). hamiltonstone (talk) 22:43, 5 January 2010 (UTC)