Talk:Khalji Revolution/GA2

GA Review

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Nominator: Noorullah21 (talk · contribs) 22:20, 23 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 03:13, 16 July 2024 (UTC) @Noorullah21: Hello, I'm going to be taking over this review as part of the July GA backlog drive. I'll likely be done with my review within a few days.

@Noorullah21 Thank you for your very prompt responses. I've gone through and given the article a second look, and I see nothing left to address before this article hits GA quality. Congratulations and thank you for your work; this was one of the more interesting topics I've read about in a GA review thus far! Kimikel (talk) 02:31, 18 July 2024 (UTC)

@Noorullah21: Below is my initial review; this was an interesting read but has a few small issues to fix before GA status. Please see and consider the following suggestions, and if you have questions on any just let me know:

Well-written

• I agree with the comment left by DeepstoneV. The Mamluks were Turkic; they did not originate from the country of Turkey. Therefore, the phrase "Turkic" should be used in place of "Turkish", even if the sources use the word "Turkish".

Fixed.

Lead

• Replace "demise" with "death"
• "Neglectful of governance," > A poor governor,

Background

• "Muhammad of Ghor" > not wikilinked to Muhammad of Ghor, who does have a page
• "the Mamluks rose to power" > how? when? doesn't have to be a whole paragraph, just a brief description of when and through what means they rose to power.
• "rival Amirs" > rival amirs
• "debauchery but"> debauchery, but
• "Delaying his departure"> After he delayed his departure,
• "secretly permitted by" > secretly permitted to do so by
• "nobles, opposed to Jalaluddin's" > nobles opposed Jalaluddin's
• "Qaiqabad, paralyzed under unknown circumstances, initiated" > Under unknown circumstances, Qaiqabad was paralyzed, initiating

Revolution

• "nobles, with Jalaluddin at the top, whom they intended to put to death" > nobles which they intended to kill, with Jalaluddin at the top.
• "Amirs" > amirs

Verifiable

• Bibliography sources should be listed in chronological order, with the oldest first.
• "A. L. Srivastava" should be listed as Srivastava, A.L.
• The "Unesco" source seems to have the authors Asimov, Muhammad Seyfeydinovich, and Bosworth, Clifford Edmund: [1]

Spot check:

• Chaurasia 2002, p. 28.: Verified
• Mehta 1979, pp. 76–91.: Does mention Balban's ascent to the throne, but does not mention Balban strengthening the Delhi Sultanate within the pages listed.
• Mahajan 2007, p. 121.: Verified
• Bowman 2000, p. 267.: Verified
• Asher & Hambly 1994.: Verified, although publish date should be changed to 21 November 2011 (its last update, according to the bottom of the article). Also add a retrieval date since it's a website

Broad

• Issues with lack of background raised in first GA review have been addressed in my opinion; with limited knowledge on this subject, I was able to follow the events easily. Article is broad in coverage

Neutral

• No issues with neutrality

Images

• All appropriately licensed and benefit article

Stable

• No issues with stability

Kimikel (talk) 23:05, 17 July 2024 (UTC)

@Kimikel: Fixed all of the above. Noorullah (talk) 00:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)

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