Talk:James Parfitt

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

• I will review this article today or tomorrow. Fair warning, I don't know much about cricket, just seems like an interesting guy. Cheers, « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• "provide more succinct arguments" - more than what? Maybe "very succinct"?
  • Rephrased this. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• "Primarily played for his fast-medium pace bowling, Parfitt played for both" - double use of "played" isn't ideal. Maybe "used" or something similar? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 00:48, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

Life and judicial career

• Not 100% necessary, but you could link Roman Catholicism
  • Linked. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• I would expand "BA" to "Bachelor of Arts" or use the {{Abbr}} template
  • Expanded. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• "Weybridge, Surrey and for three years at The Oratory School" - add "then" after "and"
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• "a role he continued until 1918." - recommend changing "continued" to "maintained"
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• I would do an interwiki link to wiktionary:witticism, since it is not a common word. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 00:48, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

Cricket career

• Being a novice cricket person, I would link Slip (cricket). I don't know what mid-off is, but there isn't a Wikipedia article that I can tell. Also, wicket.
  • Linked. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• "during the school holidays,[9] and made his debut in August 1883" - I would split in two, as it is a long sentence. i.e. "holidays. He made his debut"
  • Changed as suggested. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• Bowled is linked twice in the body of the article (WP:DUPLINK)
  • Removed one link. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• Somerset is linked twice in the body of the article « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
  • Oddly, I can only find it linked once in the body. Somerset is linked once, and Somerset County Cricket Club once too. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

Images

• File:Parfitt, JJ.jpg is almost certainly in PD, but is safely claimed as fair use. I would investigate this more to see if it is old enough to meet PD requirements, but for this review the tag and rationale are sufficient. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)
  • I imagine you're right, but I don't know any of the original publication details, and there is a mathematical chance that life of the photographer plus 70 years hasn't been hit. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

References

• I don't know if it is just me, but none of the Cricket Archive links work. here says they do, so I don't know what's up. Just check again and confirm they work for you.
  • All works fine for me, though it hits a paywall. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
• Everything else looks good here. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)

Overall

• Everything looks good. Just a few minor items. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your review. Harrias ^talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
    • Awesome, everything looks good. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:45, 13 September 2018 (UTC)