Talk:Hurricane Rafael/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 21:47, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Hello TAWX14, I will be reviewing Rafael, under the condition that you do not yell. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 21:47, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Toolbox Checks

• No issues reported. Good job! Though Peer Reviewer indicates you have only two images. Maybe you should try adding more. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• You should link tropical wave. Is it an oceanic wave? Link.

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "...it skipped tropical depression status..." I'm fine with skipped, but it sort of sounds funny. If there's any alternative, then you can change it.

I think it's fine as is. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "...a subsequent decrease..." Decrease of what. And you should probably use 'a subsequent weakening...'

I already state what in the first part of the sentence. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "...to develop in earnest..." Not sure if that is a correct usage, is it?

Why wouldn't it be? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link East Coast of the United States.

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link sea surface temperature.

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "As much as a foot of rain fell..." Needs metric conversion.

Does it? I did not use an exact total, so I don't think so. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link Bermuda.

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link Nova Scotia.

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "...but overall, damage to both locations was minimal." Which two? I see four locations in the second paragraph. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Was speaking mainly about Newfoundland... Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• "National Hurricane Center (NHC)" I would exclude the abbreviation from the link

No. It's always a part of. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "As Rafael moved northward, it continued to intensify rapidly in spite of weak wind shear." Is the occurrence weak wind shear prohibitive to the intensification of tropical cyclones? A publication indicates low wind shear is necessary for rapid intensification anyways.

Should've been moderate. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "a Category 1..." Category 1 what. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

 Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

Caribbean islands

• Link watch and warning terms

K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "By the morning hours of October 9, the warnings were discontinued for Saint Lucia and Martinique..." October 9 is before Rafael developed into a tropical storm. Did you mean that?

No. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link Federal Emergency Management Agency, and since you've been adding abbreviations to organizations, add FEMA.

K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• Link Météo-France.

K. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "...most businesses closed..." → "...most businesses were closed...*

Yes. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

• "A few people attempted to drive through flooded roads and required rescue; however, there were no reports of injuries or fatalities." I thought the one fatality associated with Rafael was the result of an attempted drive-thru of a flooded road. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Err...right. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Bermuda

• "the main two airports on Bermuda—WestJet and United Airlines—cancelled hundreds of flights on October 16." Are those airports or airlines? TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Airlines. Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Newfoundland

• Canadian Dollars are officially abbreviated as C$, not CA$. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Gotcha. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Since these were the only problems I identified, I will pass this GAN once you have fixed the aforementioned qualms. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 22:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:12, 11 March 2013 (UTC)