Talk:Emma Kaili Metcalf Beckley Nakuina/GA1

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Reviewer: Tbhotch (talk · contribs) 16:54, 23 February 2019 (UTC)Reply


GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality (prose is clear and concise, without exceeding quotations, or spelling and grammar errors):  
    B. MoS compliance (included, but not limited to: lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists):  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources (it also includes an appropriate reference section):  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary (including direct quotations):  
    C. No original research:  
    D. No copyright violations:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    edit wars, multiple edits not related to the GAN process, etc. (this excludes blatant vandalism):  
  6. Does it contain images (or other media) to illustrate (or support) the topic?
    A. Images (and other media) are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images (and other media) are provided where possible and are relevant, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  
Resolved comments from Tbhotch
;Images
  • Done.
Infobox
  • Spouse(s) Frederick William Beckley Sr. -> see {{marriage}}
  • Done.
  • Spouse(s) Moses Kuaea Nakuina -> see {{marriage}}
  • Done.
  • Children "and others" -> Ambiguous
  • Fred Beckley is the only one worth mentioning in the infobox. The other children are not noteworthy.
Lead
  • Done.
  • If you are not going to create Hawaiian National Museum soon, remove it
  • Sorry, I've been encouraged to red link relevant articles in past GA and FA reviews. Unless used frivolously, it is a perfectly okay according to policy. See Wikipedia:Red link.
Early life
  • Kaua'ala -> Kauaʻala
  • Done.
  • Her mother Kaʻilikapuolono was -> Her mother, Kaʻilikapuolono, was
  • Done.
  • "descendant of the aliʻi lineages of Oahu associated with the Kūkaniloko Birthstones" -> It is missing something to be clear
  • Changed.
  • "highest ranking chiefs" -> "highest-ranking chiefs"
  • Done.
  • "where the highest ranking chiefs of the islands were once born ... Kamehameha I during his conquest of the Hawaiian Islands." -> I find this line irrelevant to Nakuina
  • Ancestry is crucial to the identity of a Hawaiian in the 19th-century and Kamehameha I was the defining figure of the age, thus connecting Nakuina to be a descendant of a chief under the service of the conqueror king.
  • If you are not going to create Moses Kuaea, remove the link
  • Same as above.
Career
  • "The salary from this governmental post help her support her children" -> tense
  • Done.
  • "Hawaii's first female judge.[13][14][8][15]" -> see also WP:CITEKILL
  • Changed.
See also
  • Changed.
Bibliography
  • "Harper, Ida Husted, ed." -> Did you mean "et al."?
No ed is for editor. There is no accredited author for the given section about Hawaii.
  • Taylor, Albert Pierce (1926) -> unlink it, as repeated
  • Changed.
  • Yasutake, Rumi (2017) -> You're missing author 2
Categories
  • Order them alphanumerically
  • Is that a policy? I have never heard such a request.
  • WP:CATORDER mentions it is not a rule, but having any particular order is helpful. The categories go: politician, politician, nobility, alumni, origin, alumni, nobility, writer, writer, writer, judge, curator, politician, politician, date, date. If you'd argue the categories are in disorder because of a semantic field-style I wouldn't mind, but the current order isn't helpful.
Name
  • For what I've read, "Emma Kaili Metcalf Beckley Nakuina" is not her WP:COMMONAME
  • This is the version used in Notable Women of Hawaii and American Women Historians, 1700s-1990s: A Biographical Dictionary. There is no consistent usage. Calling her simply Emma Nakuina would be wrong given the importance of her first marriage and her own maiden name. KAVEBEAR (talk) 23:07, 2 March 2019 (UTC)Reply

Article on hold. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 02:23, 2 March 2019 (UTC)Reply

Not having any other objection, I pass its nomination. Good work. © Tbhotch (en-2.5). 14:56, 5 March 2019 (UTC)Reply