Talk:Eliza Meek/GA2

Latest comment: 8 years ago by KAVEBEAR in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:17, 30 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Nice article, will post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:17, 30 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

The comments in the previous review by Aoba47 have been addressed (I wonder if he/she has any more comments to make), no dablinks, no copyvio detected. Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:47, 3 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

General
  • There are some instances of WP:OVERCITE. Try to limit the number of citations after a line to three, you are not stating anything too controversial here.
Lead
  • Looking at the length of the article and per WP:MOSLEAD, the lead should be at least a good para long covering all the major points of the article.
Early life
  • She grew up with many siblings It should be clear that "she" refers to Eliza and not Betsy.
Relationship with Lunalilo
  • Emma was the widow of Kamehameha IV and a close friend of Lunalilo Place this introduction to Emma where or before you first mention her.
Later life
  • I am not sure I understand "general breaking". Does the source not say anything more or give an idea of what it was?

@Aoba47: Let me know of there is any other comments or concerns as well.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 12:54, 3 June 2016 (UTC)Reply