Talk:Defenders of Wildlife

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Neutrality edit

Latest comment: 10 years ago2 comments2 people in discussion

This page seems like it is pulled entirely from the organizational website. Not neutral, also maybe not very notable if there is no information coming from secondary sources. Brookfre (talk) 19:34, 11 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

I agree with Fikus. Also, the section discussing wolves sounds like a campaign, not a description. Include more animals that the organization is particularly interested in preserving. 12:37, 16 February 2006 (EST)

Please edit to make this page more neutral. As a start, do not use "our" or "we". Fikus 18:00, 9 February 2006 (UTC)Reply

I did not see a page for the defenders of wildlife so I created one here. Please give it time to be built as it is starting off with zero content at the moment. Help in contributing to this article would be greatly appreciated.

Tone edit

The use of 'we' and 'our' should really be avoided altogether in the article, it would be at home in their official website, but wikipedia is not here to promote a certain cause which is what this sounds like.

The language is too emotive as well and the casual mention of 'what scientists consider two of the most serious environmental threats to the planet' is enormously vague, unsupported by evidence within the article and implies this is a universal opinion.

I won't do it myself as I have no more material to add, but perhaps the next person to add something significant could take the above into account.

Grammar edit

The article switches back and forth between treating "Defenders" as a singular and plural noun. I suggest standardizing on the singular, since it is an organization.

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