Talk:Convair F2Y Sea Dart/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 11:05, 14 April 2017 (UTC)Reply


Will get to this shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:05, 14 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead and infobox;
    • was a unique American seaplane fighter aircraft; What is the purpose of "unique"?
    • The second para needs to be broken to sentences. Except the last sentence the entire para is presented as a single sentence using commas which in the end gives rise to difficulty in getting the flow and the meaning. Break this.
    •   Done
    • It was created "in 1950s" as a result of "to overcome" the problems with supersonic planes taking off and landing on aircraft carriers that was experienced in the 1950s
    •   Done
  • Section 1;
    • Link U.S. Navy on the first mention; not on the second
    •   Done
  • Section 2;
    • "Required" power was to be "put up" by a pair of after-burning Westinghouse XJ46-WE-02 turbojets
    •   Done
  • Section 3;
    • Who is E. D. "Sam" Shannon? Mention his position, if possible
      • He doesn't have a military rank, as he just worked for Convair, as a test pilot. Is that worth mentioning? Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:11, 27 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
    • but they could not cure the sluggish performance -> but they were unable to resolve the sluggish performance
    •   Done
    • a demonstration for Navy officials -> a demonstration to the naval officials
    •   Done
    • disintegrated in midair; delink the external link. External links are not allowed in the body of the article per WP:EL
    •   Done
    • Link Second World War
    •   Done
    • breakup of the airframe -> airframe breakage
    •   Done
    • Link airframe
    •   Done
    • He is buried -> He was buried
    •   Done
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 03:55, 27 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Regarding copyvio (barging in as I was passing along) - it is most likely the youtube page created on Nov 16, 2007 copied from the wiki page that existed back then - [1] - looks like an exact copy of the 2007 version, but the wiki version pre-dates the youtube entry.Icewhiz (talk) 08:34, 27 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
    @Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: I believe Icewhiz is correct here, but I shall investigate the issue. I believe that all other problems have been fixed. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 12:11, 27 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:05, 29 April 2017 (UTC)Reply