Talk:Blue Lightning (1995 video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 14:45, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

I'll do my best to get to this review before the weekend. --ProtoDrake (talk) 14:45, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

OK then! I'll be on stand by for your comments... Roberth Martinez (talk) 17:24, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

Right, here's my comments.

• The game's described as a "combat flight simulator" in the lead, but this isn't linked in the Gameplay section.

 Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

• Link United Nations.

 Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

• Is "general Drako" supposed to be a descriptor or a title (i.e., should general have a capital G or not?)

 Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

• "U.N. leaders were surprised by Drako's betrayal and actions had to be taken, as members from the Blue Lightning squadron joined his corrupted ranks while the remaining loyal forces eager a chance to overthrow his criminal group. The U.N. recurred to the squadron and assigned a rookie pilot of the force to stop Drako." These two sentences seem rather clunky. A rewrite for clarity would be a good idea.

 Done -- I did some rephrasing to this sentence... Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

• "The game's levels were co-designed by F. B. Stu, a member credited under the nickname "Mac" and Stuart Tilley," - Perhaps an extra comma to ensure it's not one person being credited under two names.

 Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

@KGRAMR: That's what stood out on a first pass. Leaving it there for now. --ProtoDrake (talk) 22:40, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

@ProtoDrake:OK, first pass done! I'll await for more comments... Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)

@KGRAMR: Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:55, 6 December 2023 (UTC)

@ProtoDrake:Thank you once again for taking the time in reviewing one of my GA nominations! Roberth Martinez (talk) 21:59, 6 December 2023 (UTC)