Talk:Blue Lightning (1995 video game)
Latest comment: 5 months ago by KGRAMR in topic GA Review
 | Blue Lightning (1995 video game) has been listed as one of the Video games good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: December 6, 2023. (Reviewed version). |
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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 14:45, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
I'll do my best to get to this review before the weekend. --ProtoDrake (talk) 14:45, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- OK then! I'll be on stand by for your comments... Roberth Martinez (talk) 17:24, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
Right, here's my comments.
- The game's described as a "combat flight simulator" in the lead, but this isn't linked in the Gameplay section.
Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- Link United Nations.
- Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- Is "general Drako" supposed to be a descriptor or a title (i.e., should general have a capital G or not?)
- Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- "U.N. leaders were surprised by Drako's betrayal and actions had to be taken, as members from the Blue Lightning squadron joined his corrupted ranks while the remaining loyal forces eager a chance to overthrow his criminal group. The U.N. recurred to the squadron and assigned a rookie pilot of the force to stop Drako." These two sentences seem rather clunky. A rewrite for clarity would be a good idea.
- Done -- I did some rephrasing to this sentence... Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- "The game's levels were co-designed by F. B. Stu, a member credited under the nickname "Mac" and Stuart Tilley," - Perhaps an extra comma to ensure it's not one person being credited under two names.
- Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
@KGRAMR: That's what stood out on a first pass. Leaving it there for now. --ProtoDrake (talk) 22:40, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- @ProtoDrake:OK, first pass done! I'll await for more comments... Roberth Martinez (talk) 22:57, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
- @KGRAMR: Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:55, 6 December 2023 (UTC)
- @ProtoDrake:Thank you once again for taking the time in reviewing one of my GA nominations! Roberth Martinez (talk) 21:59, 6 December 2023 (UTC)
- @KGRAMR: Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:55, 6 December 2023 (UTC)