Talk:Battle of Dumpu/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 03:30, 13 August 2022 (UTC)
I will take a look at this one. Zawed (talk) 03:30, 13 August 2022 (UTC)
Lead edit
- Perhaps add a couple of sentences following "the 7th Division advanced from Kaiapit to Dumpu in the Ramu Valley." to describe the nature of the advance and opposition.
Background edit
- The link on Lae isn't on its first usage.
- Between the Ramu Valley...: the link on Ramu Valley is actually to the river, which is mentioned earlier.
- Some of the dates in the Military Situation section recite the year (1943) when that has already been established and it is clear from the context that it hasn't progressed to 1944.
- ...belonging to 78th Infantry Regiment, along with one company of the 80th Infantry Regiment.: perhaps clarify that these regiments are part of the 20th Division. That introduces the division and places it in better context when it is mentioned in the next paragraph.
Battle edit
- the heavily equipped diggers: just wondering whether diggers is a little colloquial here?
- and ANGAU hired local labour: maybe provide a little context for what ANGAU is here?
- moved to Kaigulan II: what is moved to Kaigulan II? Sounds like a military base?
- Private W. H. G. remained to protect Honner: missing a surname for the private? It may not be important but the private isn't mentioned again and the reader gets the impression later that Honner had been abandoned.
Other stuff edit
- Dupe links: Lae, Papuan Infantry Battalion
- Image tags OK.
This looks to be in good order with only minor issues. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:13, 24 August 2022 (UTC)