Talk:Audrey Pauley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 02:53, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Issues

General

• No dab links. Great work!
• No dead links. Great work!
• Non-free images have good rationales.

Infobox

• Infobox Television episode should be "Infobox television episode" (extremely picky)
  • I'll change it, but does that legitimately change anything?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Per MOS:PUNCT, "Consistent use of the straight (or typewriter) apostrophe ( ' ) is recommended, as opposed to the curly (or typographic) apostrophe ( ’ )." That being said, I see that Barreiro’s and Barreiro’s Daughter use that when they should use '
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• Unlink American per WP:OVERLINK
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add comma after "Maeda"
  • I'm not so sure. Commas should be used to separate potential sentences and natural pauses. If it was "It was written by Steven Maeda and it was directed by Kim Manners", a comma would be needed, but right now, I don't think its warranted.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "unconnected to the series' wider mythology" should be "a stand-alone plot which is unconnected to the overarching fictional history of The X-Files"
  • Done. Can I ask why this is objectionable, though?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The episode earned a Nielsen household rating of 4.8 and was viewed by 5.1 million households" should be "The episode earned a Nielsen household rating of 4.8, being watched by 5.1 million households in its initial broadcast"
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "It received mostly positive reviews from television critics." should be "It has generally received positive reviews from television critics."
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• ""Audrey Pauley" guest starred Tracey Ellis as the titular Audrey Pauley". Too many "Audrey Pauley's", consider re-write that
  • Good catch.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• Add actor for Steven Murdoch
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Steven Murdoch → Stephen Murdoch
  • Another good catch.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for Mr. Barreiro
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "some sort of Hell". Hell shouldn't be in capitals
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "some sort of Hell". isn't encyclopedic. Re-write
  • Why isn't it encyclopedic? They believe they are trapped in a form of hell, as in some for of eternal punishment.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for various more
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Production

• Consider adding an image. Perhaps: File:Kimmannersxfiles.jpg
  • I'll look for one, but that one is non-free and not ideal for illustrating this article.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add comma after "Steven Maeda"
  • Again, I'm not sure.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• The Little Prince should not be in quotes. It should be italics
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Broadcast and reception

• "Audrey Pauley" originally aired on the Fox network in the United States on March 17, 2002 and in the United Kingdom on BBC One on January 26, 2003.[3] During its initial broadcast, the entry was viewed by 5.1 million households[nb 1] and ranked as the 68th most watched episode of television that aired during the week ending March 17.[8] It received a Nielsen household rating of 4.8, meaning that it was seen by 4.8% of the nation's estimated households" re-write to: ""Audrey Pauley" originally aired on the Fox network on March 17, 2002, and was first broadcast in the United Kingdom on BBC One on January 26, 2003.[3] The episode's initial broadcast was viewed by approximately 5.1 million households[nb 1], making it the the sixty-eighth most watched episode of television that aired during the week ending on March 17.[8] "Audrey Pauley" earned a Nielsen household rating of 4.8, meaning that roughly 4.8 percent of all television-equipped households, were tuned in to the episode.
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• Anyway you can add Nielsen share
  • It's not available anywhere.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The episode received mostly positive reviews from television critics" should be "The episode has generally received positive reviews from television critics."
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Notes

• Nothing

References

• Ref. 7: Unlink The X-Files: The Complete Ninth Season, and 20th Century Fox Home Entertainment as it is already linked above
  • Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

External links

• Nothing

On hold. Great work! TBrandley 07:13, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

I believe I've got them all.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 16:43, 22 July 2012 (UTC)

Yep, I'll pass. Congrats! TBrandley 17:20, 22 July 2012 (UTC)