Wikipedia talk:Today's featured article/March 4, 2018

Copyediting

Hi again, @Dank:. Thanks for your edits. I would like to request two further changes to what you currently have. I would remove genres including.

You have:

Makeba moved to the United States, where her career flourished, and released several albums and songs, including the hit "Pata Pata" (1967).

This does not entirely make grammatical sense; I would split (…flourished. She released…) rather than recast. Doing so, the whole piece would then flow better if the next sentence were to start with Makeba and Belafonte.

Lastly, I would reinstate the hyphen in civil-rights activist, as it is a compound modifier. Makeba was not a ‘civil’ person who was an activist for nebulous ‘rights’; she was an activist for civil rights. Thanks — Hugh (talk) 19:30, 1 March 2018 (UTC)

Thanks. Copying this to WT:TFA. - Dank (push to talk) 19:34, 1 March 2018 (UTC)