Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/WAVES/archive1
Blurb review edit
Pinging the nom and supporters: @Pendright, Buidhe, JennyOz, Ian Rose, and Hawkeye7:. Hi guys, this one was just promoted. Could 3 or 4 of you take a minute to read the following suggested TFA blurb, and feel free to make changes or ask questions? Even a quick vetting process might help us deal with problems at WP:ERRORS. If all goes well, I'll make a more formal proposal at WT:TFA in a couple of weeks. Thanks. - Dank (push to talk) 15:07, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
The WAVES (Women Accepted for Volunteer Emergency Service) served in the United States Naval Reserve during World War II. In July 1942 the Naval Reserve was authorized to accept women as commissioned officers and at the enlisted level, effective until six months after the war, which freed up many men for ship duty. Mildred H. McAfee, on leave as president of Wellesley College, became the first director of the WAVES. The notion of women serving in the Navy was not widely supported in the Congress or by the Navy; the new law was supported mainly by the Navy's Women's Advisory Council, Margaret Chung, and Eleanor Roosevelt, the First Lady of the United States. The WAVES were primarily white, but 72 African-American women eventually served. Serving at 900 stations in the United States and the territory of Hawaii, many of the women experienced workplace hostility, but almost all of them looked upon their service as beneficial.
- I'm not seeing any obvious errors, but I might focus more on the effect that the WAVES had on the war effort. One could add this somewhere "... the recruitment of women freed up many men for ship duty". buidhe 15:18, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- Makes sense, but we're at the upper limit for character count; what would you like to delete to make room? - Dank (push to talk) 15:47, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- I would cut the sentence stating where they were trained. That seems less important. buidhe 15:49, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- Done. Now the character count is right at the low end, if anyone wants to add something. - Dank (push to talk) 16:13, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- I would cut the sentence stating where they were trained. That seems less important. buidhe 15:49, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- Makes sense, but we're at the upper limit for character count; what would you like to delete to make room? - Dank (push to talk) 15:47, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
- Consider some aspects of the following:
- One WAVE mathematician, Grace Hopper, was assigned to Harvard University to work on the computation project with the Mark I computer. Elsa Gardner became the only female nautical engineer in the entire U.S. Navy.
- Almost all of the WAVES looked upon their service as beneficial and many said they would serve again under the same situation. Pendright (talk) 02:46, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks Pendright. Done. - Dank (push to talk) 03:04, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
- Consider some aspects of the following: