Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Segnosaurus/archive1

TFA blurb review

Segnosaurus is a genus of large-bodied therizinosaurid dinosaurs that lived during the Late Cretaceous. Discovered in the Gobi Desert in southeastern Mongolia in the 1970s, incomplete but well-preserved specimens included the lower jaw, neck and tail vertebrae, the pelvis, the shoulder girdle, and limb bones. Parts of the specimens have since gone missing or become damaged. Named in 1979, Segnosaurus ("slow lizard") is estimated to have been about 6–7 m (20–23 ft) long and to have weighed about 1.3 t (1.4 short tons). It was bipedal, with the trunk of its body tilted upwards. The head was small with a beak at the tip of the jaws, and the neck was long and slender, adapted to browsing. The forelimbs were robust, with three-fingered hands bearing large claws, and the feet had four toes. The pubic bone was turned backwards, as in birds. Segnosaurus and its relatives are thought to have been mainly herbivorous, unlike most other theropods, and slow-moving. (Full article...)

Just a suggested blurb ... thoughts and edits are welcome. - Dank (push to talk) 00:02, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

Looks good, I think the year of naming is important, I've tried to work it in instead of the date it was found, how does it look? FunkMonk (talk) 20:49, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

I tweaked it. - Dank (push to talk) 21:09, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

Is “three fingered claws” actually the correct way to say it?   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:49, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

I don't want to say with ... with. What would you prefer? - Dank (push to talk) 22:06, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

Three fingered hands with large claws? Most theropods had three clawed hands, what's important here is that they were large. FunkMonk (talk) 22:15, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

I'd prefer to avoid repeating "with" unless we have to. "with three-fingered hands and large claws"? - Dank (push to talk) 22:40, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

If it doesn't put you over the character limit, I would suggest "bearing". Lythronaxargestes (talk | contribs) 22:45, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

Yeah, that's what the intro says at least. FunkMonk (talk) 22:46, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

Done (I think). - Dank (push to talk) 22:49, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

I think it's fine. FunkMonk (talk) 21:58, 18 February 2020 (UTC)