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Nasr (1 November 1287 – 16 November 1322; reigned 14 March 1309 – 8 February 1314) was the son of Muhammad II al-Faqih and the fourth Nasrid ruler of the Emirate of Granada on the Iberian Peninsula. When he ascended the throne after his brother Muhammad III was dethroned in a palace revolution, Granada faced a three-front war against Castile, Aragon and the Marinid Sultanate (shown on the map pictured). He made peace with all three over the following year with minimal losses. Despite this, Nasr was unpopular at court due to his excessive concentration on science and astronomy, and his perceived pro-Christian sympathies. A rebellion started by his brother-in-law Abu Said Faraj and nephew Ismail ended in Nasr's abdication in favour of Ismail, now Ismail I. He was allowed to rule the eastern province of Guadix, and attempted – fruitlessly – to regain the throne with help from Castile. Nasr died without an heir in 1322. (Full article...)


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Hi HaEr48 and congratulations. A draft blurb for this article is above. Thoughts, comments and edits from you or from anyone else interested are welcome. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:12, 22 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thank you Gog the Mild, looks really good. Nice job connecting the image with the text. My minor nit is "brother-in-law's son" is a weird way to say one's nephew (it's even longer than saying "sister's son"), so I reworded that. I'm aware it's a bit ambigous as to whether it is a nephew of Nasr or Abu Said, so further edits are welcome although I think it's fine as a blurb. Also, how common is linking wiktionary entry from TFA blurb? I feel it's not that needed because the meaning is easy to infer, and the statement is meant as a description rather than a formal definition. What do you think? HaEr48 (talk) 01:37, 23 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
Hi HaEr48, that looks better. Re the Wiktionary link, I merely maintained that from the article's lead - I try to do as little damage as I can to what a what is agreed at FAC. If you prefer to not have it in the blurb, feel free to remove it. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:18, 23 June 2020 (UTC)Reply