Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/God of War II/archive1

Comments from Cirt (addressed)

1. NOTE: Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
2. Image review: File:God of War II cover.jpg and File:God of War II gameplay.jpg check out okay, however I'd recommend using WP:FURME to expand upon and standardize the fair use rationale.
3. One redlink, Carole Ruggier, not necessary just suggested, could be nice to create as a sourced stub, at the very least.
4. Reception - for quotations, inline cites should be at the end of any sentence with a quote, not just ends of paragraphs.
5. Reception - consider trimming amount of total quotations used, and paraphrase some instead.
6. References - suggest changing title of Notes sect to Works cited.
7. Soundtrack - Track listing - recommend using full names for those credited in the Music column.
8. Awards and accolades - this sect might work better in table format, rather than prose.
9. Novel - perhaps a few secondary sources after the end of this sect, about reception of the novel itself?
10. NOTE: Please respond, below these comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!

— Cirt (talk) 01:19, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

1. Confused on how to work FURME. I followed the directions but the "fur" tab isn't popping up on the image file as it said it would.
2. Stub made.
3. Fixed. Seems redundant if consecutive sentences come from the same source.
4. Worked on it.
5. Done.
6. Instead of using the full name on every track, I used the full name for the first instance their name appears, then last name in the following instances it appears.
7. I prefer the prose, plus not all of the items listed are awards per se (e.g., "swan song" of the PS2 era).
8. Can't really find any review for the book. It does consist of two secondary sources right now (the other being a primary - the publisher's website). When I get my hands on a copy and read it, I'll add more info to it (e.g., differences from the game) as I did with God of War's novel. --JDC808 ♫ 05:08, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Thanks, looks a bit better. — Cirt (talk) 05:26, 17 June 2013 (UTC)