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Latest comment: 11 years ago by TRLIJC19 in topic Addressed comments from Crisco 1492
Addressed comments from Crisco 1492 edit
- Prose comments from Crisco 1492
- "American television medical drama" - Is television necessary here? "American television medical drama" sounds awkward to me.
- I think it's fine, but I'll leave it up to your discretion. I took this from House (TV series), a FA. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
- Isaac, Shepherd, et al. have no last name?
- "mess up" - Not formal. Perhaps "make a serious mistake"
- "personal doctor" - What does this mean in this context?
- "Nowalk said those scenes were difficult to shoot." - Why?
- "Dr. Robert Bray, a neurosurgeon in Los Angeles." - Related to the show how?
- That's where the storyline about the tumor originated. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
- How would he know the producers, is what I meant. Was he signed as an advisor or something? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:25, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
- That's where the storyline about the tumor originated. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 03:13, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
- "drew on the wall" - don't use this if it's not in the literal sense. If its figurative, at the very least link to fourth wall
- Fix the CN tags (direct quotes = immediate source)
- That's it from me. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:57, 21 August 2012 (UTC)