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The following is an archived discussion of an A-Class nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in the main page's talk page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was approved by TBrandley 05:06, 1 November 2012 (UTC) [1].[reply]

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Nominator(s): TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:33, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for A-Class because while I understand some may feel it is too early for FA status, I believe this fully satisfies the criteria for A-Class. Thanks, TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:33, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support It is a great article - well written, containing all the available relevant info, with free images. Its quality has already been established after the Good Article Review. And while I myself believe it is too early for Featured Article Candidacy, it fully satisfies the criteria for A-Class. Jonathan Harol*d Koszeghi (talk) 11:48, 15 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support I agree with Jonathan; it's a good article with no apparent issues. --Sofffie7 (talk) 12:43, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from TBrandley (talk) 04:49, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "season eight finale" should be two separate links, one for season eight, one for the finale
  • "Further storylines include" I don't think that is necessary, I'd remove and say "Dr. Cristina Yang (Sandra Oh) also relocates to a different hospital, while a group of new interns are being intimidated by Dr. Meredith Grey (Ellen Pompeo).", or something like that
  • "The episode saw the death of Dr. Mark Sloan (Eric Dane); Dane" to "The episode saw the death of Dr. Mark Sloan (Eric Dane); the actor", as I'm not keen on two Dane's right by each other
  • "as disconsolate" shouldn't there be an "an" in the middle of that?
  • In plot, ""Going, Going, Gone"", and in the next sentence it opens with "The episode", since the last sentence says that, could you change "The episode" to "It" for this one
    • They're two different openings, to allow functional clarity. "It" raises confusion. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:03, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is "interns" linking in plot, and not in the lede
  • "attending general surgeon" attending shouldn't be linked there
  • Due to one of the last couple issues, can now this sentence "It is revealed" be changed to "The episode reveals"
  • "something that was initially" for Wikipedia, I wouldn't use "something", perhaps change to "a program that was initially", or instead of "a program" you could use "which", just thinking here
    • 'Something' is perfectly normal and acceptable encyclopedic usage. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:03, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I suggest tightening with deleting the "though", and then replacing comma with a semicolon.
    • Improper usage of the semi-colon – the sentence only has 3 clauses. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:03, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "his hand becomes numb" who's this, just to clarify?
    • It's obviously Derek's – writing "During Shepherd's surgery, Shepherd's hand..." would sound redundant. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 14:03, 29 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link Minnesota per WP:MOS
  • Los Angeles is overlinked in production, its first link is in the first paragraph, and the second in the third paragraph, unlink the one is in the third paragraph, per WP:OVERLINK
  • In reception, "The rating was a 7 percent increase from the previous season premiere, which received a 4.1/10 Nielsen rating/share in the 18–49 demographic. The rating" the rating one sentence after another with it doesn't seem right, perhaps change second one
  • "deemed the flashbacks featuring Sloan" to "deemed the flashbacks that featured Sloan"

TBrandley 16:06, 22 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at these issues by the end of the week; currently too busy. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 01:45, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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