Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/USS Orizaba (ID-1536)

I'd like to get some feedback on this article to see what it lacks and what it needs for improvement — Bellhalla (talk) 21:34, 8 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Carom

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Very well done. I have only a few comments.

  • The "World War II" section appears to be completely uncited. This is perhaps the only major problem, but should absolutely be corrected.
  • There are a few places with some clunky wording and awkward phrasing; a copyedit is probably warranted (we have a new request department for dedicated MilHist copyedits, you may get a fast-ish response there).

Once these two things are taken care of, I would say that this article is ready for A-Class. Carom (talk) 00:58, 9 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ryan

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Small note: when viewed with Internet Explorer there is a big white gap between the section title of "Brazilian Navy service" and it's text, perhaps caused by a combination of the infobox and the 1950's pic being on the right. Ryan4314 (talk) 20:10, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Just a few comments:

  • In the lead, it mentions "second fastest turnaround time in port", or somehting like that. I would add a citation for this one.
  • The WWII section has almost no direct inline citations. This should probably be addressed quite quickly.

Those are the only things I can find immediately. The citation issue encompasses a large majority of the article, and should be addressed AQAP (as Quickly as possible) Best of luck in taking the article forward! Cam (Chat) 20:25, 30 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The "second fastest" bit is discussed in detail in the body of the article and cited there. I try to avoid citing in the lead if possible. — Bellhalla (talk) 10:57, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks

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Thanks to all who took the time to review the article. I will be addressing have addressed the referencing that all mentioned. — Bellhalla (talk) 10:57, 3 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]