Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Operation Barrel Roll

Am rounding out work on this stub. Am looking for some constructive criticism. RM Gillespie 00:02, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice work, as usual. A few general suggestions, in no particular order:

Wording such as "After a series of political and military machinations conducted by the U.S., the Pathet Lao, and the DRV in Laos that are best described elsewhere..." may be appropriate in a book, but is out of place in an encyclopedia article; it's not at all clear what "elsewhere" refers to, and the overall structure is too self-referential, resembling the oft-decried "This article will...".
Extended quotes (e.g. "Since the fate of Laos...") should ideally be introduced rather than merely included, with the source given directly in the text.
Month/day combinations need to be linked to allow date preferences to work correctly.
Is there any particular reason why PAVN unit names are given in italics? I was under the impression that only the untranslated portions of foreign unit names are typically typeset in that form.

Kirill Lokshin 03:10, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Kirill. The italics follow the U.S. Army's format, which distinguishes enemy from friendly units. Since I do not believe that any RLG forces are directly mentioned by name, only U.S. Air Force ones, should the italics be removed? Just did it out of habit. RM Gillespie 00:05, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yep, I'd remove them; given that the article is not meant to be explicitly tied to the perspective of one of the combatants, the friendly/enemy distinction wouldn't really make sense here, in any case. Kirill Lokshin 00:09, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Took care of everything except linking the dates. Could you give me an example? RM Gillespie 01:26, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

"3 April" should be linked as "3 April", and so forth. Kirill Lokshin 02:40, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]