Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Johnston de Peyster

Johnston L. de Peyster edit

So I started this one as a stub to support the main John Watts de Peyster article and I found a lot of interesting stuff on the son. Unlike his father, there are very few sources to draw from, and they mainly discuss the flag raising incident over Richmond. I can't foresee getting much more information on his life--he was in the war at 18, then with Sickles in spain, then in the Assembly for two terms, and then dead at a young age. If I can get a copy of the Legislative Record of NY I may be able to flush it out a bit more. My main query for this article is layout, style, and language based--any suggestions or improvements would be welcome. Right not the article reads as one long paragraph. MrPrada 22:43, 2 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin edit

Quite good, overall; a few layout suggestions:

~~A leading left image coupled with an infobox produces an utterly unreadable layout on smaller-resolution monitors; the image should really be staggered down below the lead.~~
- Moved it down into the first section–is that far enough?
~~The article can be easily broken down into several sections, albeit short ones: early career, Richmond, later life; this will also help with the layout some.~~
The letter and the image next to it create similar layout problems, and should be similarly pulled apart; or, alternately, the letter can be pulled out of the box so that it can wrap around the image.
- Not sure how to pull the text out of the box. If you could make the adjustment, it'd help me understand exactly what you mean. MrPrada 01:22, 18 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  - Ok, done; please feel free to change it back if you don't like the effect. Kirill 16:49, 18 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill 01:47, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]