Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of the Eastern Solomons

Battle of the Eastern Solomons edit

I believe this article is ready for peer review. I hope, in the near future, to replace the old U.S. Navy battle map with a color one that I will attempt to draw myself. Also, respectfully request a reassessment of the article's quality scale and an assessment of the article's importance scale. Thank you in advance, Cla68 16:12, 14 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin edit

Excellent article in every respect, as far as I can tell. The only thing it needs is a bit of copyediting to clean up the occasional grammar problems (e.g. "Although heavily damaged and afire, Enterprise damage-control teams were able..."). Also, you might want to consider using {{cquote}} for the long quote in the "Aftermath" section.

Overall, though, great work! Kirill Lokshin 16:35, 14 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I added the quote template as you suggested. Since I'm so "close" to the article, it's hard for me to see the awkward grammar that a neutral 3rd party can see. If you or someone could just list the paragraphs (i.e. paragraphs 3, 7, 8, etc) where you see bad prose, I can go back and try to correct it. Otherwise, I'll step back for a few days and then proofread it again. After I try to add the color battle map I was talking about, I'll plan to go ahead and nominate it for FA. I'll archive this peer review in another couple of days if no one else adds input. Thanks again for the review. Cla68 18:25, 14 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]